again, for Didimo, Kaoutar, Karen and Sara

 This is almost perfect. I thought it was perfect until I read a second time. 

"She studied  five days a week" should be "She studies five days a week." 

You should always read a second and third time. It's easy to miss mistakes like this.

 

Didimo,Kaoutar,Karen,Sara.

Karen studied eight hours yesterday.  She studied five days a week.She intends to continue her studies for two more years.  She has lived in New York for one month.  She is going to take a vacation in Colombia this summer.  She would like to have a useful life in her country.

for Tida, Sasa and Christine

 Your work is mostly correct, but there are a few errors.

Christine's story:

-"on weekend" should be "on the weekend." 

-"handsome guy" should be "a handsome guy"

 

Sasa's story:

"flushing" should be "Flushing" with a capital letter. 

"many country people" should be "people from many countries"

Tida's story:

"in Roosevelt" should be "on Roosevelt Island" (or Avenue?)

 "NY" should be "N.Y."

 

Tida, Sasa, Christine

Christine worked 12 hours on weekend. She works two days a week. She intends to continue her job 1 year. She has lived in flushing for a month. She had never met handsome guy before she moved to NY. She is going to take a vacation in Taiwan maybe next year. She would like to have a good life in the future.


Sasa studied 4 hours yesterday. She studies 5 days a week. She intends to continue her studying three more months. She has lived in flushing for a month. She had never met many different country people before she moved to NY. She is going to take a vacation in Thailand next year. She would like to have a good life in the future.


Tida studied 4 hours yesterday. She studies 5 days a week. She intends to continue her studying 1 more year. She has lived in Roosevelt for a month. She had never seen a lot of shopping places before she moved to NY. She is going to take a vacation in South Korea. She would like to have a good life in the future.   

for Berta, Fernando and Elena.

Your three stories are mostly accurate.

"Forever" is one word, not two. You need "a" before "useful life" (the noun "life," not "live," which is a verb. Otherwise, the story about Berta is correct.

The story about Fernando is accurate except for one error. You should have used the noun, "life," not the verb, "live." Wait, I found another! Again, you forgot to put "a" before "useful."

The story about Elena has three errors. "studys" should be "studies." "Tree" is not a number but a green thing. Also, you should have put the article before "useful."



Berta worked ten hours yesterday. She works seven day a week. She intends to continue her job for ever. She has lived in New York for ten years. Berta had never met Russian people before she moved to New York. She is going to take vacation in Florida this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.


Fernando worked eight hours yesterday. He works five day a week. He intends to continue his job for 3 more years. He has lived in New York for twelve years.Fernando had never met Indian  people before he moved to New York. He is going to take vacation in California this summer. He would like to have useful live in the future.

Elena worked zero hours yesterday. She study's five day a week. She intends to continue her study  for 2 years. She has lived in New York for tree years. Elena had never met Spanish people before she moved to New York. She is going to take vacation in Russia this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.

for Jomairy, Laura and Nut.

 The work of your group shows that if you read a second time you can correct it yourself. There are few errors.

The story about Jomairy is perfect.

The story about Laura has one error. The correct sentence is "Now, she needs to have a job of some kind."

The story about Nut has no errors.

Your English is really improving with practice. 



Jomairy works at babysitting . She has  2 babies and she is going to take a vacation in the Dominican Republic. She never met people from Thailand before. She likes going to the gym for exercise. She  likes romantic and drama movies, and she loves shopping.

Laura doesn't work but she studies English hard.She is going back to Colombia in September. She likes to dance Salsa, go to the beach and go to the theater. Now,she need to has some job. She wants to go to Machupichu beach in the future.

Nut studies in Laguardia Community College. He likes to live in NY because he can go to the shows. He likes to collect sneakers and shirts. He goals is studying Computer Engineering.

for Carolina, Hyunmi and Anil

Your group worked very successfully together. 

The report on Carolina has no errors at all. 

The report on Hyunmi is also errorless. 

 The report on Anil doesn't have any errors either!

WRITE ABOUT THREE PEOPLE-"CLASSMATES"

-Carolina studied four hours yesterday. She worked in Colombia. She intends to continue her job for a long time. She had lived in Colombia for thirty years. She is going to take a vacation in Cancun this summer with her family and friends for twelve days. She is very happy with her life. :)

-Hyunmi studied four hours yesterday at La Guardia. She doesn't work. She wants to work in the future. She had lived in Korea for twenty one years. She is going to take a vacation in L.A. this summer with her sister. She is very happy with her life. :)

-Anil studied fours hours yesterday at La Guardia. He works five days a week in Manhattan. He intends to continue his job a long time. He had lived in Turkey for eighteen years. He is going to take a vacation next October with his girlfriend. He would like to have a good life in the future in Miami. :)

for Kathereen, Aiqing and Elvire

Kathereen, Aiqing and Elvire

 

Accurate work! Check spelling of Manhattan. 

"Men" is plural. I think you meant singular "man." 

"marriage" is a noun. You should have used "married," the verb (past tense). 

Kathereen and Aiqing worked with Elvire in Manthan last night in a fancy restaurant. They worked ten hours for three long days. They had many responsibilities in that job. They worked hard because they are going to Florida  for vacation this Summer. They need to save money to buy three tickets and other things. In the restaurant there was a big party last night where Elvire met somebody. Elvire and this secret men fall in love, this men work in the FBI and he was there because he had a secret mission. Aiqing found an earring with a big stone, so she sold this earring and she has a lot money for this. Then she will buy a big house in China. Kathereen work like a dog for two more years.She marriage a rich men but he is a good swindler in Wall Street. 

to Kaoutar, Didimo, Sara and Karen

 Your work is accurate. There are just two errors. "She lived in New York" should be "She has lived in New York." The word "come" should be past tense "came."

 

 

Kaoutar,Didimo,Sara,Karen

 Sara studied five hours yesterday.  She studies five days a week. She lived in New York for seven months.  She had never lived away from Mom and Dad before she come to New York .  She intends to be a
 nurse in the future. She is going to take a vacation in Algeria this summer. He would like to have a useful life with her husband in the future.

Kaoutar,Didimo,Sara,Karen

 Sara studied five hours yesterday.  She studies five days a week. She lived in New York for seven months.  She had never lived away from Mom and Dad before she come to New York .  She intends to be a
 nurse in the future. She is going to take a vacation in Algeria this summer. He would like to have a useful life with her husband in the future.

Kathereen, Aiqing and Elvire.

Kathereen and Aiqing worked with Elvire in Manthan last night in a fancy restaurant. They worked ten hours for three long days. They had many responsibilities in that job. They worked hard because they are going to Florida  for vacation this Summer. They need to save money to buy three tickets and other things. In the restaurant there was a big party last night where Elvire met somebody. Elvire and this secret men fall in love, this men work in the FBI and he was there because he had a secret mission. Aiqing found an earring with a big stone, so she sold this earring and she has a lot money for this. Then she will buy a big house in China. Kathereen work like a dog for two more years.She marriage a rich men but he is a good swindler in Wall Street.  

Carolina, Hyunmi and Anil

WRITE ABOUT THREE PEOPLE-"CLASSMATES"

-Carolina studied four hours yesterday. She worked in Colombia. She intends to continue her job for a long time. She had lived in Colombia for thirty years. She is going to take a vacation in Cancun this summer with her family and friends for twelve days. She is very happy with her life. :)

-Hyunmi studied four hours yesterday at La Guardia. She doesn't work. She wants to work in the future. She had lived in Korea for twenty one years. She is going to take a vacation in L.A. this summer with her sister. She is very happy with her life. :)

-Anil studied fours hours yesterday at La Guardia. He works five days a week in Manhattan. He intends to continue his job a long time. He had lived in Turkey for eighteen years. He is going to take a vacation next October with his girlfriend. He would like to have a good life in the future in Miami. :)

Jomairy,Laura,Nut

Jomairy works at babysitting . She has  2 babies and she is going to take a vacation in the Dominican Republic. She never met people from Thailand before. She likes going to the gym for exercise. She  likes romantic and drama movies, and she loves shopping.

Laura doesn't work but she studies English hard.She is going back to Colombia in September. She likes to dance Salsa, go to the beach and go to the theater. Now,she need to has some job. She wants to go to Machupichu beach in the future.

Nut studies in Laguardia Community College. He likes to live in NY because he can go to the shows. He likes to collect sneakers and shirts. He goals is studying Computer Engineering.

Fernando,Elena,Berta

Berta worked ten hours  yesterday . She works seven days a week . She intends to continue her job forever She has lived in NY ten  years.She had never met a Russian people before she moved to NY She is going to take a vacation in Florida this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.


Fernando worked eight hours  yesterday . She works five days a week . She intends to continue her job forever She has lived in NY ten  years.She had never met a Russian people before she moved to NY She is going to take a vacation in Florida this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.

Elena worked zero hours  yesterday . She study's five a week . She intends to continue her job forever She has lived in NY ten  years.She had never met a Russian people before she moved to NY She is going to take a vacation in Florida this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.

Fernando, Berta, Elena

Berta worked ten hours yesterday. She works seven day a week. She intends to continue her job for ever. She has lived in New York for ten years. Berta had never met Russian people before she moved to New York. She is going to take vacation in Florida this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.


Fernando worked eight hours yesterday. He works five day a week. He intends to continue his job for 3 more years. He has lived in New York for twelve years.Fernando had never met Indian  people before he moved to New York. He is going to take vacation in California this summer. He would like to have useful live in the future.

Elena worked zero hours yesterday. She study's five day a week. She intends to continue her study  for 2 years. She has lived in New York for tree years. Elena had never met Spanish people before she moved to New York. She is going to take vacation in Russia this summer. She would like to have useful live in the future.

Tida, Sasa, Christine

Christine worked 12 hours on weekend. She works two days a week. She intends to continue her job 1 year. She has lived in flushing for a month. She had never met handsome guy before she moved to NY. She is going to take a vacation in Taiwan maybe next year. She would like to have a good life in the future.


Sasa studied 4 hours yesterday. She studies 5 days a week. She intends to continue her studying three more months. She has lived in flushing for a month. She had never met many different country people before she moved to NY. She is going to take a vacation in Thailand next year. She would like to have a good life in the future.


Tida studied 4 hours yesterday. She studies 5 days a week. She intends to continue her studying 1 more year. She has lived in Roosevelt for a month. She had never seen a lot of shopping places before she moved to NY. She is going to take a vacation in South Korea. She would like to have a good life in the future.   

Didimo,Kaoutar,Karen,Sara.

Karen studied eight hours yesterday.  She studied five days a week.She intends to continue her studies for two more years.  She has lived in New York for one month.  She is going to take a vacation in Colombia this summer.  She would like to have a useful life in her country.

working together

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for Ana Convers

Thanks for your sentences about Obama. I've made some changes here. Please look and compare.

From the teacher:

1. Obama is the 44th President of the United of America.
2. He is also the winner also the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize.
3. He has been very successful with his message.
4. Barack's family moved to Indonesia in 1967.

5. Obama majored in political science.

6. He worked as the director of a community project.

7. He became an Illinois Senator in 1996.

8. Obama was elected as a US Senator

9. He supported legislation on conservation.

10. Diplomacy and cooperation between peoples

From Ana:

1. Obama is 44th President of the United of America.
2. He is the winner also the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize.
3. He has been very successful with his message.
4. Barack's family moved to Indonesia in 1967

5. Obama majores in political science

6. He worked as a director of the community project

7. He became an Illinois Senator in 1996

8. Obama was elected as a US Senator

9. He supported on conservation legislation

10. Diplomacy and cooperation between peoples

for Sasa, Sara and Karen

 Sasa, Sara and Karen, 

Thanks for your drama. It shows how students and teachers really talk to each other. Learning a language is not easy.  People should help each other and most do. Please take a look at the new copy (from the teacher). You will see a few minor changes.

By the way, I didn't understand this part:  "It is not nice to share their"

from the teacher:

Sherwin: Good morning . Hpw are you doing?
              Oh, why is the new student crying?

Dacine: I have a problem.

James: What kind of problem do you have?

Dacine: I am trying  to speak better, but my partners always laugh at me.. I have been here just three months  and I have made an effort to correct my pronunciation so they should  help me, not laugh at me. They discourage me.

Sherwin: It is not nice to share their so I will  try to speak with them to help you and you improve pronunciation. This course is to Help everyone not to harm.

Dacine: Thanks, teacher, for understanding me.

 

 

Original

Sherwin: good morning , how are you doing?
              Oh, why is the new student crying?

Dacine: I have a problem.

James: What kind of problem do you have?

Dacine: I am trying  to speak better, but my partners always laugh at me.. I have been here just three months  and I have made an effort to correct my pronunciation so they should  help me, not laugh at me. They discourage me.

Sherwin: It is not nice to share their so I try to speak with them to help you and you improve pronunciation. This course is to Help everyone not to ham

Dacine: Thanks teacher to undersatanding me.

Welcome Saturday students!

Welcome to the blog.

Click "Sign in" on the top right.

Then write the USER NAME and PASSWORD

Then click ENTER

Then click on the PENCIL ICON

Sasa/Sara/Karen

Sherwin: good morning , how are you doing?
              Oh, why is the new student crying?

Dacine: I have a problem.

James: What kind of problem do you have?

Dacine: I am trying  to speak better, but my partners always laugh at me.. I have been here just three months  and I have made an effort to correct my pronunciation so they should  help me, not laugh at me. They discourage me.

Sherwin: It is not nice to share their so I try to speak with them to help you and you improve pronunciation. This course is to Help everyone not to ham

Dacine: Thanks teacher to undersatanding me.

for Laura, Nut, Woong and Viviana

 

Laura, Nut, Woong and Viviana, thank you for your drama.  You have created a realistic situation. I think learning anything is interesting if students are creative, as you have been in this drama. After all, history- for example, of American Independence- is the creation of people like you and me. 

 

Your drama shows students helping each other. Also, the teacher is pretty understanding. The situation isn't easy, but the students are not discouraged. That's great.

I have rewritten your work. Please take a look at it ("from the teacher") and see changes from the original. There are a few. 

from the teacher:

Teacher (Nut) : Hello, everybody. Today we will talk  about American Independence.
Esol (ViViana) : i don't understand.
U.S. student (Woong) : It's boring.
Other student (Laura) : Booooo.
Teacher : Since 1800, when the first American people came from the USA ......
Esol : (She starts to cry) 
U.S. student :Viviana, are you ok? 
Esol : No! I don't understand anything. The teacher uses new words, and she speaks very fast.
Other student : Viviana doesn't understand. She is like a donkey.
Teacher : Laura, get out of my class! Viviana, don't worry.i know English is not easy, but when you learn it your life will be better because education is the key to a better future.
 U.S. student : Let's go to the cafetaria. Viviana, remember that N.Y.C. is a melting pot and has many cultures and people from other countries.

 

 

Original:

teacher (Nut) : Hello everybody today we talk  about the American Independence
Esol (ViViana) : i don't understand
U.S. student (Woong) : It's boring 
other student (Laura) : Buuuuuuuu..
teacher : Since 1800 when the first American people come from the USA ......
Esol : (she starts to cry) 
US student :ViViana are you ok? 
Esol : No! i don't understand anything the teacher uses new words and she speaks very fast
other student : ViViana doesn't understand.She likes a donkey
teacher : Laura outside of my class! ViViana,don'tworry.i know the English is not easy but when you learn it your life will be better because the education is the key for better in the future
 US student : Let's go to the cafetaria .ViViana remember that NYC is a melting pot and has many cultures and people from other countries.

Laura, Nut, Woong and Viviana

teacher (Nut) : Hello everybody today we talk  about the American Independence
Esol (ViViana) : i don't understand
U.S. student (Woong) : It's boring 
other student (Laura) : Buuuuuuuu..
teacher : Since 1800 when the first American people come from the USA ......
Esol : (she starts to cry) 
US student :ViViana are you ok? 
Esol : No! i don't understand anything the teacher uses new words and she speaks very fast
other student : ViViana doesn't understand.She likes a donkey
teacher : Laura outside of my class! ViViana,don'tworry.i know the English is not easy but when you learn it your life will be better because the education is the key for better in the future
 US student : Let's go to the cafetaria .ViViana remember that NYC is a melting pot and has many cultures and people from other countries.

for Elvire, Anil and Carolina

Elvire, Anil and Carolina, thank you for your drama. This is a conversation teachers and students have many, many times. The teacher is always happy to hear that students did homework and found it easy and interesting.  In an ESOL class, the homework is interesting because the students are interesting.  

 

Please take a look at the rewritten drama "from the teacher" below and compare it to the original. There are two more commas. Also, there is no comma before "because." Everything else was correct.

 A comma is this: ,

 

from the teacher:

-Teacher Elvire: How are you guys? Did you do homework for today?

 

-ESOL student Anil: I'm good, teacher. Yes, I did.

-U.S. student Carolina: Did you understand that homework?

- Student Anil: Yes, I understood that homework because it was very easy and interesting.

 

original:

-Teacher Elvire: How are you guys? Did you do homework for today?

-ESOL student Anil: I'm good teacher. Yes I did.

-U.S. student Carolina: Did you understand that homework?

- Student Anil: Yes, I understood that homework, because it was very easy and interesting.

for Didimo, Kaoutar and Haruki

 Didimo, Kaoutar and Haruki, your drama is appreciated. In it, you show the balance students need to find. Sometimes a person feels discouraged. Other people can help by reminding him or her the purpose of studying. Your drama is about hope. 

Please look at the version of your drama from the teacher. There are some very small differences from the original. You should pay attention to little things, like capital letters. They are important to support the larger things.

from the teacher:

Teacher Kaoutar        :  Why are you crying ? What is your problem ?

Esol Student Haruki   :  Because in the cafeteria the other students mocked me  because my English is very bad, and I  feel discouraged .

U.S student Didimo   : Don't be discouraged. It's very easy to becoming fluent in English.  Just be patient, and don't worry about what the other students think about your accent.

Teacher Kaoutar      :    That is true . You can learn fast if you make a strenuous effort, and remember that the U.S.  is "The land of opportunity."You can have a better future in this country if you speak English .

Esol Student Haruki :    Thank you, teacher and Didimo, for your support. I feel better. Now I understand how I can assimilate to the American culture and how to be integrated in the society.

 

 

Original:

Teacher Kaoutar        :  Why are you crying ? what is your problem ?

Esol Student Haruki   :  Because in the cafeteria the other students mocked me  because my English is     
                                    very bad and I  feel  discouraged .

U.S student Didimo   : Don't be discouraged its very easy to becoming fluent in English, just be patient ,
                                  and don't worry about what the other students think about your accent.

Teacher Kaoutar      :    That is true , you can learn fast if you make a strenuous effort and remember that the
                                     U.S.  is "The land of opportunity", you can have a better future in this country if you
                                    speak English  .

Esol Student Haruki :    Thank you teacher and Didimo for your support , I feel better .Now I understand
                                    how I can assimilated to the American culture and how to be integrated in the
                                    society.

for Berta, Christine and Hyun mi

 

Berta, Christine, Hyun mi, thanks for your drama. It is an example of "realism." You show a real situation.  Characters discuss problems, give advice and show kindness.   

 

Please look at the drama from the teacher below and compare it to your original . There was only one change, from "lower case" to "upper case" in line 3.

 

from the teacher:

 1. Teacher Jhon: How do you feel? You look very sick.
2. ESOL stud. Kara : Yes, I'm still sick. That's why I didn't come yesterday.
3. U.S stud. Christina: I'm sorry to hear that. Feel better now?
ESOL stud. Kara: Yes. But I need to see a doctor.
Teacher Jhon: I agree. If you feel very sick, you can go right away. and I hope to see you as soon as possible.
ESOL stud. Kara: Thank You.
U.S. Stud. Christina: I hope you get well soon.
ESOL stud. Kara: I hope so. See you soon.

 

 

 

Berta, Christine, Hyun mi

Teacher name: Jhon
ESOL student name: Kara
U.S. student name: Christina



Teacher Jhon: How do you feel? You look very sick.
ESOL stud. Kara : Yes, I'm still sick. That's why I didn't come yesterday.
U.S stud. Christina: I'm sorry to hear that. feel better now?
ESOL stud. Kara: Yes. But I need to see a doctor.
Teacher Jhon: I agree. If you feel very sick, you can go right away. and I hope to see you as soon as possible.
ESOL stud. Kara: Thank You.
U.S. Stud. Christina: I hope you get well soon.
ESOL stud. Kara: I hope so. See you soon.

for Ai Qing, Fernando and Elena

 Ai Qing, Fernando and Elena, thank you for your entertaining drama. You show the human side of learning a language.  It isn't easy! Students need solidarity and humor to keep going. You show you have both. 

I've rewritten your conversation below with some changes. You should look and compare it with the original. 

from the teacher:

Teacher Monika:          Hello, students!!!! Good morning!!!!

                                   How are you doing?

Student Cheng Long:   Hello, teacher! we are fine!! (everbody smiles)

Teacher  Monika :        My name is Monika. I am the grammar teacher.

Student  Alex:               Oooo..... (((Grammar is too hard! But we have to learn English very well )))))

C:                                 Yes, its true, because we are all from different countries.

T:                                  Don't be scared. That's why you came here to learn English. Trust me.  If you keep going and study hard, you will be better.

A:                                 I wish!!! 

 C:                                I am here because my English is so bad...((( I am very worried about it...

A:                                 Me too.

T:                                  Let's go guys !!!! We are going to start! Grammar awaits you!! Enjoy it!

 

original

Teacher Monika:          Hello, students!)))))) Good morning!))))

                                   How are you doing?

Student Cheng Long:   Hello, teacher! we are fine)) ( everbody smile )

Teacher  Monika :        My name is Monika. I am grammar's teacher.

Student  Alex:               Oooo..... ((( grammar is too hard! But we have to learn English very well )))))

C:                                 Yes, its true, because we are all from different countries

T:                                  Don't be scare that's why you came here for learn English.Trust me if you keep going     and study hard you will be better.

A:                                 I wish!!! 

 C:                                I am here because my English is so bad...((( I am very worry about it...

A:                                 Me too.

T:                                  Let's go guys !!!! we are start! Grammar wait you!! enjoy it!

for Jomairy,Doraliz and Kathereen

 

Jomairy, Doraliz and Kathereen,

 

Thanks for your well-written drama. It shows a lot about the characters. They are supporting each other. The conversation begins with one character crying and ends with all three characters going together to have fun.  You really explore the ideas we talked about in class in an original and effective way.

 

We talked about punctuation, and you're right: most of the periods and capital letters are there, but some are not. Please look at the teacher's copy (below):

 

from the teacher:

 Doraliz  said : Why are you crying,  Kathy ?

Kathy said : Because I feel alone in this country; I miss my family and friends.

Jomairy said : Don't worry.  I know you feel lonely, but you have Doraliz and me.  We are your friends .

Doraliz said: We feel the same because we are in the same boat, but we have  to be here for a better life for ourselves and our families.

Kathy say: Thanks. I appreciate your advice and support, friends.

Jomairy said : Let's go, girls. It's time to eat and party.

 

 

original:

 Doraliz  said : why are you crying kathy ?
Kathy said : because i feel alone in this country ,I miss my family and friends
Jomairy said : don't worry I know you feel lonely but you have me and doraliz we are your friends .
Doraliz said: we feel the same,because we are in the same boat but we have  to be here for a better life for ourselves and our families.
Kathy say: Thaks I appreciete your advice and support friends.
Jomairy said : lest go girls is time to eat and party

Jomairy,Doraliz and Kathereen

 Doraliz  said : why are you crying kathy ?
Kathy said : because i feel alone in this country ,I miss my family and friends
Jomairy said : don't worry I know you feel lonely but you have me and doraliz we are your friends .
Doraliz said: we feel the same,because we are in the same boat but we have  to be here for a better life for ourselves and our families.
Kathy say: Thaks I appreciete your advice and support friends.
Jomairy said : lest go girls is time to eat and party

Ai Qing, Fernando,Elena

Teacher Monika:          Hello, students!)))))) Good morning!))))

                                   How are you doing?

Student Cheng Long:   Hello, teacher! we are fine)) ( everbody smile )

Teacher  Monika :        My name is Monika. I am grammar's teacher.

Student  Alex:               Oooo..... ((( grammar is too hard! But we have to learn English very well )))))

C:                                 Yes, its true, because we are all from different countries

T:                                  Don't be scare that's why you came here for learn English.Trust me if you keep going     and study hard you will be better.

A:                                 I wish!!! 

 C:                                I am here because my English is so bad...((( I am very worry about it...

A:                                 Me too.

T:                                  Let's go guys !!!! we are start! Grammar wait you!! enjoy it! 

 


                   
 

Berta, Christine, Hyun mi

Teacher name: Jhon
ESOL student name: Kara
U.S. student name: Christina



Teacher Jhon: How do you feel? You look very sick.
ESOL stud. Kara : Yes, I'm still sick. That's why I didn't come yesterday.
U.S stud. Christina: I'm sorry to hear that. feel better now?
ESOL stud. Kara: Yes. But I need to see a doctor.
Teacher Jhon: I agree. If you feel very sick, you can go right away. and I hope to see you as soon as possible.
ESOL stud. Kara: Thank You.
U.S. Stud. Christina: I hope you get well soon.
ESOL stud. Kara: I hope so. See you soon.

   

Didimo,Kaoutar,Haruki

Teacher Kaoutar        :  Why are you crying ? what is your problem ?

Esol Student Haruki   :  Because in the cafeteria the other students mocked me  because my English is      
                                    very bad and I  feel  discouraged .

U.S student Didimo   : Don't be discouraged its very easy to becoming fluent in English, just be patient ,
                                  and don't worry about what the other students think about your accent.

Teacher Kaoutar      :    That is true , you can learn fast if you make a strenuous effort and remember that the
                                     U.S.  is "The land of opportunity", you can have a better future in this country if you
                                    speak English  .

Esol Student Haruki :    Thank you teacher and Didimo for your support , I feel better .Now I understand
                                    how I can assimilated to the American culture and how to be integrated in the
                                    society.

Elvire, Anil and Carolina

4-16-13

DRAMA ABOUT COLLEGE

-Teacher Elvire: How are you guys? Did you do homework for today?

-ESOL student Anil: I'm good teacher. Yes I did.

-U.S. student Carolina: Did you understand that homework?

- Student Anil: Yes, I understood that homework, because it was very easy and interesting.

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for Hyunmi

Hyunmi,

Thank you for your introduction to Christine. 

 I've written the introduction again, with some small changes. Please look at it and notice the differences from the original. 

 

from the teacher:

Hello everyone,
 I want to introduce you to Shinsoojung, who would like you to call her Christine .
She is from Yongin, Korea.
She is 22  years old in Korean age.
She has been in the  U.S for 6 months and in N.Y for almost 3 weeks
She came here for an internship in restaurant management after graduating college.
She wants to enter NYU and to be an owner in the entertainment industry.

 

original:

Hello.
I want to introduce you to shinsoojung,christine.
she is from yongin, korea.
she is 22years old in korean age.
she has been U.S 6 months, and N.Y almost 3 weeks
she came to for internship restaurant management after graduating college.
she want to enter NYU, and to be owner in entertainment.

hyunmi kim

Hello.
I want to introduce you to shinsoojung,christine.
she is from yongin, korea.
she is 22years old in korean age.
she has been U.S 6 months, and N.Y almost 3 weeks
she came to for internship restaurant management after graduating college.
she want to enter NYU, and to be owner in entertainment.

Viviana Valle

Thanks Kevin,

I review the corrections

Viviana

for Karen

Karen,

Thank you for your writing about your partner Tida. Please look below at the re-writing I did and compare it to your original. There are differences. Watch out for punctuation (end sentences with periods).

from the teacher

I would like to introduce you to Tida. She is 24 years old and comes from Thailand. She arrived 1 month ago, and she will been in N.Y. for 1 year. She decided to come here to study English because she wants to earn a Masters Degree in food science in New York. At the moment, she doesn´t work in New York but in her country she has a job in a company where she makes quality food.   

original

I would like to introduce you to Tida, she is 24 years old and comes from Thailand, she arrived 1 month ago and She will been in NY for 1 year. she decided come here to study English because she wants to make Master Degree in food science in New York. At the moment she doesn´t work in New York but in her Country have a work in a company when she make a quality food.   

for Jomairy

Thanks for your very concise introduction to your partner Anil.

I've made some changes for you to look at.

from the teacher:

Hi,
I would like to introduce you to my friend Anil.  He is from Turkey .He is 20 years old, and he wants to be an actor.

Original:

HI
I introduce you my friend ANIL he is from Turkey .He is 20 years old and he wants to be an actor

JOMAIRY RODRIGUEZ

HI
I introduce you my friend ANIL he is from Turkey .He is 20 years old and he wants to be an actor
 

for Didimo

 Didimo, thanks for your succinct introduction to your classmate Chanwoong. I have written it a second time below. You should look at my writing and compare it to the original. The only problem was punctuation (periods and capital letters).

from the teacher:

My name is Didimo. I would like to introduce you to Woong. He is a nice guy that comes from Korea. He likes New York and thinks that this city is very interesting. He lives in Queens  and takes the 7 train everyday  to come to the school. He wants learn English very well because wants to be a graphic designer.



Original:

My name is Didimo i would like to introduce you to Woong he is a nice guy that comes from korea he likes new york and thinks that this city is very interesting he lives in queens  takes the 7 train everyday  to came to the school he wants learn english very well because wants to be a graphic designer.

for Kaoutar

 Kaoutar,

 Thank you for your introduction to Sara.  I have written it again with some changes. Please take a look and see the differences from the original.In fact, there are only two changes, capital letters. The rest of your writing was correct.

from the teacher:

Hello,

I would like to introduce you to Sara. She is 24 years old and comes from Algiers, Algeria. She arrived in New York 6 months ago. She found  that  New york is an amazing city .
She  decided to study English now, because she wants to improve her English, and she wants to study nursing.She lives with her husband ,and she doesn't have a job for now.

 

original:

Hello,

I would like to introduce you to Sara. She is 24 years old and comes from Algiers, ALGERIA. She arrived in New York 6 months ago. She found  that  New york is an amazing city .
She  decided to study English now, because she wants to improve her english, and she wants to study nursing.She lives with her husband ,and she doesn't have a job for now.

for Carmen

Carmen,

Thanks for writing about Karen and posting your writing here. You found the page successfully.

I have made some changes in your writing. Please look at it. You will find some corrections.



From the teacher:


I would like to introduce you to Karen.  She is 24 years old and she comes from Bogotá, Colombia.  She has been living here for 4 months.  She decided to study English because she needs to take the TOEFL test.  She graduated in business administration in Colombia. She only wants to learn  good English, to take her test and come back to her country.  She is not working; she only is studying.  Her hobbies are playing tennis and swimming.

Original:

I would like to introduce you to Karen.  She is 24 years old and she comes from Bogotá, Colombia.  She has been living here 4 mounth.  She decided to study english because she needs to take TOEFL test.  She graduated in business administration in colombia. She only wants to learn a good english, to take her test and come back to her country.  She is not working, she only is studing.  Her hubbies are playing tennis and swimming.

Carmen

I would like to introduce you to Karen.  She is 24 years old and she comes from Bogotá, Colombia.  She has been living here 4 mounth.  She decided to study english because she needs to take TOEFL test.  She graduated in business administration in colombia. She only wants to learn a good english, to take her test and come back to her country.  She is not working, she only is studing.  Her hubbies are playing tennis and swimming.

kaoutar

Hello,

I would like to introduce you to Sara. She is 24 years old and comes from Algiers, ALGERIA. She arrived in New York 6 months ago. She found  that  New york is an amazing city .
She  decided to study English now, because she wants to improve her english, and she wants to study nursing.She lives with her husband ,and she doesn't have a job for now.

Didimo Arteaga

My name is Didimo i would like to introduce you to Woong he is a nice guy that comes from korea he likes new york and thinks that this city is very interesting he lives in queens  takes the 7 train everyday  to came to the school he wants learn english very well because wants to be a graphic designer.

Karen

I would like to introduce you to Tida, she is 24 years old and comes from Thailand, she arrived 1 month ago and She will been in NY for 1 year. she decided come here to study English because she wants to make Master Degree in food science in New York. At the moment she doesn´t work in New York but in her Country have a work in a company when she make a quality food.   

for Viviana

Viviana, thanks for writing and putting on the blog your introduction to Nut. I have written it again with some changes in grammar and punctuation. You should look and see the differences between the teacher's version and the original.

from the teacher:

His name is Pongsakorn, but he prefers "Nut".
Nut arrived in N.Y. 8 months ago and lives with his parents, cousin and aunt in Elmhurst, Queens.
He misses Thailand because it is quiet.  Nut said that in N.Y.  life is fast.
In the future Nut will be a Computer Engineer,. His dream is to study at  City Tech in Brooklyn.
Now he doesn't work, only studies English.
He was my first friend in LaGuardia.
Nut is friendly and a good boy.

Original

His name is Pongsakorn, but he preffer "Nut".
Nut arrived at NY 8 months ago, live with his parents, cousin and aunt in Elmhurst, Queens.
He missing Thailand, because is quiet, Nut said that in NY the life is fast.
In the future will be a Computer Engineer, your dream is study in CityTECH in Brooklyn.
Now he don't work only study English.
He was my first friend in LAGUARDIA.
Nut is friendly and a good boy.

For Pongsakorn (Nut)

 Nut, thanks for posting your introduction to your classmate. I have read it and written it again with some changes. Please take a look and see the differences. 

from the teacher:

Her name is Viviana. She was married. (or: She is married. If she was married, she is single now.

She arrived in N.Y. 1year and a half ago. She lives with her husband, and she lives in Astoria, Queens.

She comes from Ecuador.


She doesn't work in New York.

She needs to learn English because she wants to work in the United Nations.

She is very friendly and smiles always

 

Original:

She name is Vivina.She was married.
She arrived in NY 1year and half ,she lives with her husband ,and She lives in Astoria,Queens
She comes from Ecuador.
She doesn't work in New York.
She needs to learn English because she wants to work in United Nations.
She is very friendly and smile always

for Fernando

Fernando,

Thanks for introducing us to Elvire. I've made some changes to the original, fixing some grammar and punctuation. Please look and see the differences.

from the teacher

I would like to introduce my partner                                                                                          

Her name is Elvire. She comes from the Ivory Coast. She is very young, and she has been in New York one month,  so she misses her country.

She decided to study English because she would like  to have a professional title, like a business woman, and in the future get a good job in a big company .
She  does not have a job for now because she is focused on learning English.
She has never worked so she cannot change  her job in the future .
She is new in this country, so she cannot tell too much if she likes or dislikes New York.

Original

I would like to introduce my partner                                                                                          

Her name is Elvire she comes from Ivory Coast ,she is very young and she has been in New York one month  so she misses her country .
She decided to study english because she would like  to have profesional title like a business and the future she get a good job on a big company .
She  does not have a job for now because she is focus in learn english .
She never work so she can not change  the job in future .
She is new in this country so she can not tell to much if she likes or dislikes New York

for Elvire

Elvire,

Thank you for introducing Fernando on the blog.

I've made some changes to your writing. You should take a look and see the differences.

from the teacher:

I would like to introduce you to my partner
 His name is Fernando.
He is 30 years old and comes from  Ecuador.
He arrived in New York 13 years ago.
He has decided to study English to improve his English and get opportunities to have a good job.
He wants to have his own business, like a restaurant.
He already has a job in a restaurant.
He likes New York and doesn't have educational plans.
He is not married and has no children.
He has family in New York and lives with them.

 

 

original

I would like to introduce you my partner
 his name is Fernando.
he is 30 years old and comes from to Ecuador.
he arrived in new York 13 years ago.
he decides to study English to improve his english and get opportunities to have a good job.
he want to have his own business likes restaurant.
he jobs already in the restaurant.
he likes new York and don't have educational plans.
he is not married and no childrens.
he have family in new York,lives with their.

for AiQing Liang

 Thanks for writing this introduction to SaSa. 

These are some changes (corrections) to your writing. 

from the teacher:

Her name is SaSa.
She has been here one week.
She is from Taiwan.
She has job in Taiwan was selling LEDs.
She came here for vacation and learning English.
She likes to go outside(like Central Park, Times Square, etc.)

 

Original

Her name is SaSa.
She has been here one weeks.
She is from Taiwan.
She has job in Taiwan,sell LED.
She come here for vacation and learning English.
She likes to go outside(like Central park Time square...ect )

AiQingLliang

Her name is SaSa.
She has been here one weeks.
She is from Taiwan.
She has job in Taiwan,sell LED.
She come here for vacation and learning English.
She likes to go outside(like Central park Time square...ect )

elvire

I would like to introduce you my partner
 his name is Fernando.
he is 30 years old and comes from to Ecuador.
he arrived in new York 13 years ago.
he decides to study English to improve his english and get opportunities to have a good job.
he want to have his own business likes restaurant.
he jobs already in the restaurant.
he likes new York and don't have educational plans.
he is not married and no childrens.
he have family in new York,lives with their.

Wilson Fernando Defaz

I would like to introduce my partner                                                                                           

Her name is Elvire she comes from Ivory Coast ,she is very young and she has been in New York one month  so she misses her country .
She decided to study english because she would like  to have profesional title like a business and the future she get a good job on a big company .
She  does not have a job for now because she is focus in learn english .
She never work so she can not change  the job in future .
She is new in this country so she can not tell to much if she likes or dislikes New York

Pongsakorn (Nut)

She name is Vivina.She was married.
She arrived in NY 1year and half ,she lives with her husband ,and She lives in Astoria,Queens
She comes from Ecuador.
She doesn't work in New York.
She needs to learn English because she wants to work in United Nations.
She is very friendly and smile always

Viviana Valle

His name is Pongsakorn, but he preffer "Nut".
Nut arrived at NY 8 months ago, live with his parents, cousin and aunt in Elmhurst, Queens.
He missing Thailand, because is quiet, Nut said that in NY the life is fast.
In the future will be a Computer Engineer, your dream is study in CityTECH in Brooklyn.
Now he don't work only study English.
He was my first friend in LAGUARDIA.
Nut is friendly and a good boy.

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