for Hyunmi

Hyunmi,

Thank you for your introduction to Christine. 

 I've written the introduction again, with some small changes. Please look at it and notice the differences from the original. 

 

from the teacher:

Hello everyone,
 I want to introduce you to Shinsoojung, who would like you to call her Christine .
She is from Yongin, Korea.
She is 22  years old in Korean age.
She has been in the  U.S for 6 months and in N.Y for almost 3 weeks
She came here for an internship in restaurant management after graduating college.
She wants to enter NYU and to be an owner in the entertainment industry.

 

original:

Hello.
I want to introduce you to shinsoojung,christine.
she is from yongin, korea.
she is 22years old in korean age.
she has been U.S 6 months, and N.Y almost 3 weeks
she came to for internship restaurant management after graduating college.
she want to enter NYU, and to be owner in entertainment.