for Karen

Karen,

Thank you for your writing about your partner Tida. Please look below at the re-writing I did and compare it to your original. There are differences. Watch out for punctuation (end sentences with periods).

from the teacher

I would like to introduce you to Tida. She is 24 years old and comes from Thailand. She arrived 1 month ago, and she will been in N.Y. for 1 year. She decided to come here to study English because she wants to earn a Masters Degree in food science in New York. At the moment, she doesn´t work in New York but in her country she has a job in a company where she makes quality food.   

original

I would like to introduce you to Tida, she is 24 years old and comes from Thailand, she arrived 1 month ago and She will been in NY for 1 year. she decided come here to study English because she wants to make Master Degree in food science in New York. At the moment she doesn´t work in New York but in her Country have a work in a company when she make a quality food.