"Obama" from Martha

Thursday, October 24, 2013

"Obama" from Martha

Barack Obama

Barack Obama is the 44th president of the United State of America. He is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel peace prize. He made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. Presidential election. He is the first African American to be president. Obama’s  charisma , intelligence, and powerful with his message for change.

Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961 to a black Kenyan father and white American mother. His parents divorced and his mother married an Indonesian man. Barack’s family moved to Indonesia in 1967. He attended schools in Jakarta until he was ten years old, when he returned to Hawaii. Obama majored in political science and international relation at Columbia University in New York.

 After four years in New York, Obama moved to Chicago. There, he worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988. He entered Harvard Law School and became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review. Obama taught law at the University of Chicago Law School for twelve years. He became an Illinois Senator in 1996.

In 2004, Obama was elected as a U.S. Senator. He supported legislation on conservation, energy, immigration and honest leadership. Obama is currently battling with serious issues such as the economy, the global credit crisis and wars in Iraq and Afghanistan. He won the Nobel Peace Prize for his “extraordinary efforts to strengthen international diplomacy and cooperation between peoples.”

Ivonne Ecuador \ Luisa Colombia \ Alberto Peru \ Pedro Ecuador

Names:

Ivonne  Ecuador  Pedro Ecuador
Luisa   Colombia
Alberto   Peru


Paragraph 1
Overall, the best country to be a women is Iceland.
the worst country to be a women is 25 , 34 and 80 respectively. The USA is 23.

-Excellent, Pedro. You should remember to start the second sentence with a capital letter. 


Paragraph 2
when it comes to health the best countries to be a woman are Hauritania, Mexico and France.

the worst is India or countries are 55 , 34 and 109 respectively. The USA is number 33.


-Good again. Remember to start each sentence with a capital letter. 


Paragraph 3

when it comes to education he best countries to be a woman are  USA
the worst is Benin or countries are 52 , 45 and 88 respectively. The USA is number 1.


-Again, capital letters are necessary to start sentences. Also, there should be a comma (,) after "education.

(When it comes to education, the best country to be a woman IS the U.S.A.



Paragraph 4

when it comes to Economics he best countries to be a woman are  Norway
the worst is Siria or countries are 90 , 39 and 88 respectively. The USA is number 6.

-Remember: "are" is plural. You named only one country, Norway, so the sentence is singular and should have "is." (The best COUNTRY to be a woman IS Norway). 


Paragraph 5

when it comes to Politics he best countries to be a woman are  Iceland ,  Argentina
the worst is Siria or countries are 17 , 65 and 69  respectively. The USA is number 60.

-Overall, the writing is correct, Pedro. You should watch punctuation (capital letters and periods especially). 

"Woman Marries a Bridge"

Later, you will read a true story about a woman who married a bridge in France.

There is some new vocabulary. This will help you understand it.

1. What is the name of this bridge? Look.

http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/f/f0/Brooklyn_Bridge_Postdlf.jpg

2.  Do you like big weddings? How many guests? 

3. What color dress does the bride usually wear? Look!

http://blog.dressesshop.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/Kate-wedding_dress.jpg

4. What color is a wedding ring? Look.

http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/3/3d/Wedding_rings.jpg

5. Do you believe in "love at first sight?"

6. Can you pronounce "bridge" and "bride"? Look with your partner.

BRIDGE:

http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/0/0c/GoldenGateBridge-001.jpg

BRIDE:

http://www.bridesamore.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/bride.jpg

7. Can a person fall in love with a thing? (for example, a song, a painting)?

8. What can a person fall in love with?

9. Do you want to visit France? Look with your partner:

http://images1.fanpop.com/images/photos/2600000/HQ-France-wallpapers-france-2627082-1600-1200.jpg

10. What language do people speak in Australia? 

11. Do you have a friend who is an artist? Musician?

12. Who is the mayor of New York city? Look.

http://www.hedgeco.net/news/wp-content/uploads/2013/09/bloomberg2.jpg

13. Do you agree with "same-sex" marriage?

14. New York is busy and noisy. What brings you peace in New York? (music? friends? reading?...)

15. Did you ever record your voice in English and listen?

16. Do you care more about the "spiritual" or the "material"? 

17. Which one is spiritual and which is material?

a. love

b. money

c. food

d. religion

e. a car

f. happiness

g. dreams

h. hope

i. a job

18. Do you prefer quiet people or talkative people? Why? 

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"Martha's Group" by Martha Betancur

Martha   Betancur

         There are five people in our group, we are five women. The maximum age is forty nine, the minimum age is twenty three and the average is thirty five. The students in our group have the following occupation: Two babysitter, housekeeper, and housewife. We are all students now.

  We come from a total of four countries and represent three continents; Asia; Europe, and America. Three languages are spoken by our group.  They are Azerbaijan, Spanish, and Russian.

  The largest hometown represented in our group is Medellin with a population of one million. The smaller hometown is Azogues   with a population of five thousand. Our marital status is varied two people are married, two have been divorced and one is single.  

Three of us live with family, two have a roommate.

The person that has been the longest in New York in my group is Martha .She came here twenty years ago. By contrast Ulkar has been here just one year and six months .She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group, and we welcome her. The average length of time in New York is about eight and a half years.

It’s always nice to meet with new, good people. 

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Martha,

Your article arrived by email and I am posting it here. Below is the corrected version. In fact, very few corrections were necessary:

         There are five people in our group. We are five women. The maximum age is forty nine, the minimum age is twenty three and the average is thirty five. The students in our group have the following occupationS: two babysitterS, housekeeper, and housewife. We are all students now.

  We come from a total of four countries and represent three continents: Asia; Europe, and America. Three languages are spoken by our group.  They are Azerbaijan, Spanish, and Russian.

  The largest hometown represented in our group is Medellin, with a population of one million. The smallEST hometown is Azogues,  with a population of five thousand. Our marital status is varied. Two people are married, two have been divorced and one is single.   

Three of us live with family, AND two have a roommate.

The person that has been the longest in New York in my group is Martha .She came here twenty years ago. By contras,t Ulkar has been here just one year and six months .She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group, and we welcome her. The average length of time in New York is about eight and a half years. 

It’s always nice to meet with new, good people.                                                                                                  

                                                                                         

The group by Juana Garcia

There are 5 people in our group. Two are men and three are women. The maximum age is 52,the minimum age is 28 and the average age is 28. Students in our group have the following occupations:sculptor(person),construction worker,attended sale store. We are all students now.

We came from a total 5 countries and represent 2 continents Asian and American,3 languages are spoken by our group, Spanish,Chinese and Thai.

The largest hometown represented in our group is Beijing,China,with a population of is million. The smallest hometown is Ecuador,Quito with a population of 1million.

Our marital status is varied. Four person is married one is single.
Four of us live with family,one lives has a room mate.

Tree person in my group who has been,Angel and Vanessa whos came here 6 years ago. By contrast Sutchivadee has been here just 2 years. She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group,and we welcome her the average length of time in New York is about six years.

Everybody like study inglish.

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Juana,

It's good to have your writing here. Thanks for sending it.  I'm writing it again below, with corrections. Look for the differences.

You should notice punctuation: commas and periods.


"The Group" by Juana Garcia

There are 5 people in our group. Two are men and three are women. The maximum age is 52,the minimum age is 28 and the average age is 28. Students in our group have the following occupations: sculptor(person), construction worker and sales attendant in a store. We are all students now.

We came from a total 5 countries and represent 2 continents: Asia and America. 3 languages are spoken by our group: Spanish,Chinese and Thai.

The largest hometown represented in our group is Beijing,China,with a population of !2(?) million. The smallest hometown is Ecuador,Quito with a population of 1million.

Our marital status is varied. Four people are  married one is single.Four of us live with family, and one has a room mate.

The people in my group who have been here the longest are Angel and Vanessa, who came here 6 years ago. By contrast, Sutchivadee has been here just 2 years. She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group,and we welcome her. The average length of time in New York is about six years.

Everybody likes to study English.



 

Homework_Tingting

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There are 4 people in our group, all of us are females. The maximum age is 48, the minimum age is 25 and the average age is 37. Students in our group have the following occupations: consultant, security officer and two factory workers. We are all students now.

We come from a total of 4 countries and represent 3 continents, Europe, South America and Asia.  3 languages are spoken by our group: Polish, Spanish and Chinese.

The largest hometown represented in our group is Baoutou, China, with a population of 4 million. The smallest hometown is Canar, Ecuador, with a population of 1200.

Our marital status is varied. One person is single and the other three are married.

Three of us live with family and another one lives with her fiance.

The person in my group who has been in New York the longest is Teresa, who came here 15years ago. By contrast, I have been here just more than two years. The average length of time in New York is about 7 year.

We all feel very lucky to know each other in this class and we are sure the future English exploration will benefit us a lot.

Tingting


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Tingting,

Thanks for sharing your writing here. 

I see a punctuation problem. The technical word for it is "comma splice." The first sentence has one. 

"There are 4 people in our group, all of us are females" has incorrect punctuation. There are at least three ways to correct it. 

You could make two separate sentences:

A. "There are 4 people in our group." All of us are females."

It's also possible to keep the comma by using a conjunction. 

B. "There are 4 people in our group, and all of us are females. 

Another- and maybe the most effective way- is to use an adjective clause. 

C. There are 4 people in our group, all of whom are females.

In the second paragraph, you should introduce a list with a colon (:), not with a comma (,). You used the correct one with languages but not with continents. 

When you write numbers with four digits or more, you need to use commas. 

1000 is incorrect. 1,000 is correct. 

Other than those very minor punctuation errors, the writing is error-free. 

Gerardo Galarza

                                                                The Group

    There are 5 people in our group. Three are women and two are men. The maximum age is 49, the minimum age is 16 and the average age is 24. Students in our group have the following occupations: waiter, babysitter, accountant and dry cleaner manager. We are all students now.

    We come from a total of 4 countries and represent 2 continents, America and Asia. 3 languages are spoken by our group: Spanish, Thai, and Nepal.

     The largest hometown represented in our group is Mexico,with a population of 90.000.000. The smallest hometown is Thailand of 60.000.

      Our marital status is varied. 2 person are married and 3 are single. 3 of us live with family, one live alone and another has a room-mate.

       The person in my group who has been in New York the longest is Santiago who can here 16 years ago. By contrast Emon has been here just one month. She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group, and we welcome her. The average length of time in new York is about seven years old.

        We are happy and excited in this group to keep learning from each other.


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Gerardo, this looks fine. At first glance, I see no errors at all. But let's look closer.

One suggestion: when you type on the computer, you don't need to "indent" paragraphs. Just skipping a line is enough to show that the paragraphs are separate.

When you write numbers with 4 digits or more (thousand, ten thousand, etc.), use commas instead of periods.

10,000,000 is correct

10.000.000 is incorrect.

Remember that "person" in the fourth paragraph is plural. It should be "people," of course.

Also in the fourth paragraph, "one" is 3rd person singular (he, she or it) and the present tense verb after it needs an "s." "lives" is correct. (you remembered with "has"; that's correct).

In paragraph five, you wrote "can" instead of "came," the past tense of "come."

new York is incorrect. New York is correct.

"The average length of time in new York is about seven years old." You should delete one word from this sentence. I think you can find which one.

                    Maria Penafiel  There are five people in our group all of us females . The maximum age is fouty- nine, the minimum age is twenty- three- and the average age is thirty- five . Students in our group  have the following occupations ; two babysitters, bastender,  housekeeper, housewife.   We are all students now. We come from a total of four contries and represent three continents; Sourth America , Asia, and Europe. Three lenguages  are spoken  by our group; Spanish , Azerbaijani , and Russian. The largest hometown represented in our group is Medellin, Colombia ,with a population of 1 millon, The smallest hometown is Azogues , with a population 5 tousand. Our marital  status is varied . Two people are married one person is single ,one is divorsed, one is separated. Three of us live with family members and anothers  live with roommate . The person in my group who has been in New York  the longest is Martha , who come here 20 years ago. By contrast Ulkar has been here one and half years . She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group .  The average  length  of time in New York  is about eight and  half years.         It's olways nice to meet new good people  


Maria,

Nice writing!

I've copied your article and made corrections with BIG letters so they are visible.

Some of the corrections are just one letter, for a spelling error.

Spelling in English is difficult. I advise you to use the "spell check" (abc above)

It's a good idea to make separate paragraphs. That's easier to read than one long paragraph.


"The Group" by Maria Penafiel

 There are five people in our group. All of us ARE females. The maximum age is FORTY- nine, the minimum age is twenty- three- and the average age is thirty- five . Students in our group  have the following occupations;  two babysitters, bastender,  housekeeper AND housewife.   We are all students now.

We come from a total of four coUntries and represent three continents; Sourth America , Asia, and Europe. Three lAnguages  are spoken  by our group: Spanish , Azerbaijani and Russian.

The largest hometown represented in our group is Medellin, Colombia, with a population of 1 million. The smallest hometown is Azogues, with a population OF 5 tHousand.

Our marital  status is varied . Two people are married. One person is single. One is divorCed. One is separated.

Three of us live with family members and THE others  live with roommateS.

The person in my group who has been in New York  the longest is Martha , who cAme here 20 years ago. By contrast, Ulkar has been here one and A half years . She has been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group .  The average  length  of time in New York  is about eight and A half years.

It's always nice to meet new, good people.  

                                                                                                                                         

  Padam raj badu.              
                             There are five people in our group.Three are women and two are man.The maximum
                             age is forty-nine ,the minimum age is sixteen and the average age is thirty-five.Stud
                             ent in our group have the following occupation,waiter,baby sister,accountant and dry
                             clener.We are all student now.
                                                                             We came from total of four countries and represent tw
                              o contients,Asia,and america.Three langueges are spoken by our group spanish,thai
                              and nepali.
                                                The largest hometown represented in our group is Maxico with populat
                              tion of ninety millions.The smallest hometown is Thailand with the population of
                              sixty millions.
                                                   Our marital status is varied.Three are singles,two are married.
                               Three of us live with family,one of roommate and one is living single.The person
                                is my group who has been in NewYork the longest is santiago.Who came here six
                                 teen years ago.By contrast emon has been just one month.She has been in NewY
                                ork the shortest of anyone in our group,and we welcome her.The average leant of
                                the time in NewYork is about seven years.
                                                                                                 We are happy and excited in this group

                                 to keep leaning from each others.      


Padam,

Thank you for putting your writing on the blog. I hope it wasn't difficult to use the password and user name. Anyway, you succeeded.

I've copied your article with corrections in capital (BIG) letters so they are easy to see.  Please read and see the changes. Notice, for example, that the first letter of place and people names are capitalized. Also, there is never an "s" at the end of an adjective.

    

   
"Our Group" by Padam Raj Badu


There are five people in our group.Three are women and two are MEN.The maximum age is forty-nine, the minimum age is sixteen and the average age is thirty-five. StudentS in our group have the following occupationS: waiter,babySITTER, accountant and dry cleaner. We are all studentS now.

We came from total of four countries and represent two contiNents, Asiaand America.Three languAges are spoken by our group: Spanish, Thai and Nepali.

The largest hometown represented in our group is MExico, with A POPULATION of ninety MILLION.The smallest hometown is Thailand, with A population of sixty MILLION.

Our marital status is varied.Three are SINGLE, AND two are married. Three of us live with family, one WITH A roommate and one is living single.

The person is my group who has been in NewYork the longest is Santiago, who came here sixteen years ago.By contrastT,  Emon has been just one month. She has been in NewYork the shortest of anyone in our group, and we welcome her.The average LENGTH of time in NewYork is about seven years.

 We are happy and excited in this group to keep LEARNing from each others.