for Elvire

Elvire,

Thank you for introducing Fernando on the blog.

I've made some changes to your writing. You should take a look and see the differences.

from the teacher:

I would like to introduce you to my partner
 His name is Fernando.
He is 30 years old and comes from  Ecuador.
He arrived in New York 13 years ago.
He has decided to study English to improve his English and get opportunities to have a good job.
He wants to have his own business, like a restaurant.
He already has a job in a restaurant.
He likes New York and doesn't have educational plans.
He is not married and has no children.
He has family in New York and lives with them.

 

 

original

I would like to introduce you my partner
 his name is Fernando.
he is 30 years old and comes from to Ecuador.
he arrived in new York 13 years ago.
he decides to study English to improve his english and get opportunities to have a good job.
he want to have his own business likes restaurant.
he jobs already in the restaurant.
he likes new York and don't have educational plans.
he is not married and no childrens.
he have family in new York,lives with their.