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Your summary gives all the main ideas of the article about Dr. Alfredo Quinones. Anyone who reads this will clearly understand the key points.
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NEW VERSION
Alfredo Quinones Hinojosa is from Mexico, He came to the USA in 1970. He was an illegal immigrant when he hopped a border fence from Mexico. Today, he is neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkins University, and a researcher to find a new treatment of brain cancer. The distance of his hometown form the USA border is about 60 miles. He was born there. His first job, at age 5, was working in a small gas station of his father. His grandmother had two jobs, village healer and midwife. In the mid-1970, when Mexico's economy collapsed, Alfredo was 18 years old. He continued his schooling and he become a teacher. He made the decision to head north, to provide for his family. Alfredo Quinones worked on a farm in the U.S. picking cotton,tomatoes and cantaloupes. He lived in a broken down camper that he bought for $300. When his cousin told him that he would be a farmer for always, he started studying English at the community college. Then, he attended the University of California, Berkeley. He developed a passion for the scientific method, so he attended Harvard Medical School, where he delivered the commencement speech. He also got his U.S citizenship at that time. Quinones- Hinojosa owes his success to people who gave him a hand throughout his life.
ORIGINAL VERSION
Alfredo Quinones Hinojosa , he is from Mexico , He came to the USA in 1970, he was a former illegal immigrant when he hopped a border fence from Mexico. Today, he is neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkins University, and a researcher to find a new treatment of brain cancer. The distance of his hometown form the USA border is about 60 miles, he was born there. His first job at age 5, was working in a small gas station of his father. His grandmother had two jobs, village healer and midwife. In the mid-1970, when Mexico economy collapsed, Alfredo had 18 years, He continued his schooling and he become a teacher. Him made the decision to head north, to provide for his family. Alfredo Quinones, Alfredo Quinones worked on a farm in U.S. picking,cotton,tomatoes and cantaloupes. He lived in a camper broken down, he bought in $300, when his cousin told him what he would be a farmer for always, he started studying English at the community college, then, he attended to the University of California,Barkeley. He developed a passion for the scientific method, so he attend Harvard Medical School, where he delivered the commencement speech. He also got his U.S citizenship at that time. Quinones- Hinojosa owes his success to people who gave him a hand throughout his life.
Your summary gives all the main ideas of the article about Dr. Alfredo Quinones. Anyone who reads this will clearly understand the key points.
I've made some changes in grammar and punctuation. Please take a look and see the differences between the new version and the original (below):
In fact, most of your sentences are correct. The summary is well-written. Be careful of punctuation. Put periods at the end of every sentence. Sometimes you used commas (,) instead of periods (.).
NEW VERSION
Alfredo Quinones Hinojosa is from Mexico, He came to the USA in 1970. He was an illegal immigrant when he hopped a border fence from Mexico. Today, he is neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkins University, and a researcher to find a new treatment of brain cancer. The distance of his hometown form the USA border is about 60 miles. He was born there. His first job, at age 5, was working in a small gas station of his father. His grandmother had two jobs, village healer and midwife. In the mid-1970, when Mexico's economy collapsed, Alfredo was 18 years old. He continued his schooling and he become a teacher. He made the decision to head north, to provide for his family. Alfredo Quinones worked on a farm in the U.S. picking cotton,tomatoes and cantaloupes. He lived in a broken down camper that he bought for $300. When his cousin told him that he would be a farmer for always, he started studying English at the community college. Then, he attended the University of California, Berkeley. He developed a passion for the scientific method, so he attended Harvard Medical School, where he delivered the commencement speech. He also got his U.S citizenship at that time. Quinones- Hinojosa owes his success to people who gave him a hand throughout his life.
ORIGINAL VERSION
Alfredo Quinones Hinojosa , he is from Mexico , He came to the USA in 1970, he was a former illegal immigrant when he hopped a border fence from Mexico. Today, he is neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkins University, and a researcher to find a new treatment of brain cancer. The distance of his hometown form the USA border is about 60 miles, he was born there. His first job at age 5, was working in a small gas station of his father. His grandmother had two jobs, village healer and midwife. In the mid-1970, when Mexico economy collapsed, Alfredo had 18 years, He continued his schooling and he become a teacher. Him made the decision to head north, to provide for his family. Alfredo Quinones, Alfredo Quinones worked on a farm in U.S. picking,cotton,tomatoes and cantaloupes. He lived in a camper broken down, he bought in $300, when his cousin told him what he would be a farmer for always, he started studying English at the community college, then, he attended to the University of California,Barkeley. He developed a passion for the scientific method, so he attend Harvard Medical School, where he delivered the commencement speech. He also got his U.S citizenship at that time. Quinones- Hinojosa owes his success to people who gave him a hand throughout his life.
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