writing about Alfredo

Work with your partner (write one story together, same computer) about Alfredo.

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Write both your name and your partner's name. Work together. Relax. Enjoy.

Hello my name is Pannarai Kansangsi . I have lived in new york for 10 year .
Right now I lives in Woodside, Queens. I lives there by myself. I works in Thai restaurant in Manhattan as waitress . I works there 5 days a week . My friend recommended me to study English.
Now I'm happy to learn English. I hope when I finish the course, I can improve my English and can
 go everywhere I want.

     My classmate Paulina lives  and work in New York. He has been here for one year. She plans to stay in New York a long time. She worries every day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. Last year


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correction:

 My classmate Paulina lives  and work in New York.


-My classmate Paulina lives and works in New York.

He has been here for one year. (correct if you change "He" to "She")



She plans to stay in New York a long time. (correct)

She worries every day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. (correct)


Well done beginning!

My classmate andres lives and works in New York.
He has been here for eight years.
He plants to stay in New York a long time.
He worries every day about problems in New York his family.
Last year he and his family went to equadore for vacation .
Before he came to lived in equadore.
His goal is to finish his college then he make good Carrier.
If he were Obama , he would make more work facility.

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correction:

My classmate andres lives and works in New York.

-My classmate Andres lives in works in New York. 

He has been here for eight years. (correct)

He plants to stay in New York a long time.

-He plans to stay in New York a long time. 

He worries every day about problems in New York his family.

-He worries every day about problems in New York involving his family. 

Last year he and his family went to equadore for vacation .

(Ecuador should be begin with a capital letter)

Before he came to lived in equadore.

-Before he came to New York, he had lived in Ecuador. 

His goal is to finish his college then he make good Carrier.

-His goal is to finish his college, then to make a good career. 

If he were Obama , he would make more work facility.   

-If he were Obama, he would make more work facilities ("more" comes before a plural noun)

My classmate is Jantima, she is from Thailandia, but she has been living in New York for 1 year. Jantima has a nickname Beau. Actually She lives in Queens but she works in Manhattan. Beau is studying Enfglish in Laguardia, because she always is with her friends, but they only speak in Thai. A Beau's friend spook about Laguardia, therefore she knew this school. Beau is happy living in New York because she finds many friends, different cultures, great places as Central Park. Beau has many pictures in her Iphone about parks, bridges, streets,  and sceneries. When Beau speaks about New York she always has a smile in her face.

I think really Beau is happy in New York! She has not family people here, but Beau has many friends, specially from Thai and Latinos, therefore she can to learn some words in Spanish.

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correction:

My classmate is Jantima, she is from Thailandia, but she has been living in New York for 1 year. 

-My classmate is Jantima. She is from Thailand, but she has been living in New York for 1 year. (separate sentences by periods (.)

Jantima has a nickname Beau. 

-Jantima has a nickname: Beau. 

Actually She lives in Queens but she works in Manhattan. 

-At present, she lives in Queens, but she works in Manhattan. 

Beau is studying Enfglish in Laguardia, because she always is with her friends, but they only speak in Thai. (correct)

A Beau's friend spook about Laguardia, therefore she knew this school. 

A friend of Beau's spoke about Laguardia. Therefore, she knew this school. 

Beau is happy living in New York because she finds many friends, different cultures, great places as Central Park. 

-Beau is happy living in New York because she finds many friends, different cultures and great places, such as Central Park.

Beau has many pictures in her Iphone about parks, bridges, streets,  and sceneries. 

-Beau has many pictures on her iPhone about parks, bridges, streets and scenery ("scenery" is uncountable)

When Beau speaks about New York she always has a smile in her face.

-When Beau speaks about New York, she always has a smile on her face. 

I think really Beau is happy in New York! (correct) 

She has not family people here, but Beau has many friends, specially from Thai and Latinos, therefore she can to learn some words in Spanish.

-She has no people in her family here, but Beau has many friends, especially from Thailand and Latin America. Therefore, she can learn some words in Spanish. 

My classmate Hosse lives and works in New York. He has been here for over three decades..He plans to stay in New York a long time. He worries every day day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. He

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correction:

My classmate Hosse lives and works in New York.

-My classmate Jose lives and works in New York.

 He has been here for over three decades. (correct)

He plans to stay in New York a long time. (correct)

He worries every day day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. (correct)

Hello!

I am going to talk about my classmate Leonor. She has been living in New York for three years. She is single and she lives alone. She likes to help people and so why she adopted two children from South America. She is working and likes her job a lot, but she thinks living in New York more expensive than her country. Before she came to New York, Leonor had lived in Chile. Her goal is learn English as soon as possible and live easily in the US. If she were Obama, she would give the right immigration reform. 


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correction:

I am going to talk about my classmate Leonor. (correct)

She has been living in New York for three years. (correct)

She is single and she lives alone. (correct)

She likes to help people and so why she adopted two children from South America.

-She likes to help people, so she adopted two children from South America.

She is working and likes her job a lot, but she thinks living in New York more expensive than her country.

-She is working and likes her job a lot, but she thinks living in New York is more expensive than her country.

Before she came to New York, Leonor had lived in Chile. (correct)

Her goal is learn English as soon as possible and live easily in the US. (correct!)

If she were Obama, she would give the right immigration reform. (correct)

My classmate Leonor lives and works in New York. She has been

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This is a good start. There are no errors.

My classmate Anna lives and work in New York.she has been here over 2 1/2 years. she plans to move to Florida this year for better life and taxes relief. last yeas she want with her family to Peru for vacation and they liked it. before she come to New York she had lived in Poland. she goal is to be a good wife and mother and learn English for better life. If  she were Obama. she would make a better social help an


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correction:

My classmate Anna lives and work in New York.  (correct)

she has been here over 2 1/2 years. (start with a capital S)

she plans to move to Florida this year for better life and taxes relief.

-She plans to move to Florida this year for a better life and tax relief.

last yeas she want with her family to Peru for vacation and they liked it.

-Last year she went with her family to Peru, and they liked it.


before she come to New York she had lived in Poland. (start the sentence with a capital letter)


she goal is to be a good wife and mother and learn English for better life.

-Her goal is to be a good wife and mother and learn English for a better life.

If  she were Obama. she would make a better social help an

-If she were Obama, she would make better social help and..

My classmate Eddie lives and works in New York. He has been here for over eighteen years. He plans to stay in New York a long time. He worries every day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. Last year he and his family went to Mexico for vacation. Before he came to New York, Eddie had lived in Dominican Republic. His goal is to be a good husband and father, he want to learn very good English and find better job. If he were Obama, he would give health insurance for free for everybody.

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correction

My classmate Eddie lives and works in New York. (correct)

He has been here for over eighteen years. (correct)

He plans to stay in New York a long time. (correct)

He worries every day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. (correct)

 Last year he and his family went to Mexico for vacation. (correct)

Before he came to New York, Eddie had lived in Dominican Republic.

-Before he came to New York, Eddie had lived in the Dominican Republic.

His goal is to be a good husband and father, he want to learn very good English and find better job.

His goal is to be a good husband and father. He wants to learn very good English and find a better job.

(note: Use a period (.) not a comma (,) between sentences.

If he were Obama, he would give health insurance for free for everybody. (correct)

Andres Zurita



   My classmate Zamim lives on New York. He lives anf works in Brooklyn New York. He has been here for over one year. He plans to stay on New york forever. He don't have worries. Last year he and his family went to Florida for vacation. Before he came to New York, Zamim had lived in Pennsylvania. His goal is to be a movie director. If he were Obama, he would make college free for all students.

   My name is Andres, i live and work in New York. i been here for over 8 years. I plan to stay on new York forever. I worrie every da aboit my family back on my c

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correction:

  My classmate Zamim lives on New York. 

-My classmate Zamin lives in New York. 

He lives anf works in Brooklyn New York. 

-He lives and works in Brooklyn, New York. 

He has been here for over one year. (correct)

He plans to stay on New york forever. 

-He plans to stay in New York forever. 

He don't have worries. 

-He doesn't have worries. (That's fantastic). 

Last year he and his family went to Florida for vacation. (correct)

Before he came to New York, Zamim had lived in Pennsylvania. (correct) 

His goal is to be a movie director. (correct)

If he were Obama, he would make college free for all students. (correct!)

   My name is Andres, i live and work in New York. i been here for over 8 years. I plan to stay on new York forever. I worrie every da aboit my family back on my c

-My name is Andres. I live and work in New York. I have been here for over 8 years. I play to stay in New York forever. I worry every day about my family back in my country. 

Diane lives and works in Queens New York
She has been there for over six months
Diane plans to stay in New York a short time
She worries every day about spike inglihs
Last year she and boy frend go in to Villavicencio
Before she  came to New York .Diane had lived in Colombia
Shes goal is good person and frenly for every vari
She is Obama, I would give more  support the countrys


Soren live Masphet  and work in Manhattan
I been there for  over 15 years

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correction:

Diane lives and works in Queens New York. (correct)

She has been there for over six months (correct)

Diane plans to stay in New York a short time (correct)

She worries every day about spike inglihs

-She worries every day about speaking English. 

Last year she and boy frend go in to Villavicencio

-Last year she and her boyfriend went to Villavicencio. 

Before she  came to New York .Diane had lived in Colombia (correct)

Shes goal is good person and frenly for every vari

-Her goal is to be a good person and friendly for everybody. 

She is Obama, I would give more  support the countrys

-If she were Obama, she would give more support to the countries. 

Soren live Masphet  and work in Manhattan

-Soren lives in Maspeth and works in Manhattan. 

I been there for  over 15 years

-I have been here for over 15 years. 

My classmate Lisa in New York with her  hasband per five years   she have to return to hre
country she likes here but she  missing up her family u

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correction:

My classmate Lisa in New York with her  hasband per five years   she have to return to hre

country she likes here but she  missing up her family 

-My classmate Lisa has lived in New York with her husband for five years. She has to return to her country. She likes it here but she misses her family. 

About Mr. Ammine


1.Ammine lives and study English in Manhattan. He is from capital city of Algeria, before he came here he was living in France for study.

2.He has been here 3wweks.

3.He plans to stay here, If he get great job.

4.He worries about cold weather in winter of NYC, because his country is warmer than here very much.

5.last year he was in France for studying financial.

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correction:

1.Ammine lives and study English in Manhattan. He is from capital city of Algeria, before he came here he was living in France for study.

-Ammine lives and studies English in Manhattan. He is from the capital city of Algeria. Before he came here, he was living in France to study. 

2.He has been here 3wweks.

-He has been here three weeks. 

3.He plans to stay here, If he get great job.

-He plans to stay here if he gets a great job. 

4.He worries about cold weather in winter of NYC, because his country is warmer than here very much.

-He worries about cold weather in winter of New York because his country is very much warmer than here. 

5.last year he was in France for studying financial.

-Last year he was in France to study finance. 

Hi My name is Jantima, My nickname is beau
My Classmate Edwin lives and work in Queens,New York. He came from Colombia and he has been here for 9 months. He lives here alone . He choose to study in Laguadia because everyone told him This school is very good he believe them and go to here. He love to live  in here because he think New York is window which open to the word ( New York has a lot of people f


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Correction:

Hi My name is Jantima, My nickname is beau

-Hi. My name is Jantima. My nickname is Beau. 

My Classmate Edwin lives and work in Queens,New York. (correct)

 He came from Colombia and he has been here for 9 months. (correct)

He lives here alone . (correct)

He choose to study in Laguadia because everyone told him This school is very good

-He chose to study at LaGuardia because everyone told him this school is very good. 

 he believe them and go to here.

-He believed them and came here.  

 He love to live  in here because he think New York is window which open to the word ( New York has a lot of people f

-He loves to live here because he thinks New York is a window which opens to the world (New York has a lot of people from...)

History about my classmate

          I studies in Laguardia Commuity College, i am an international student from Algeria. To day, i meet a new classmate from Japan his name is TOMOTA, he came from Tokyo 3 years ago for working in TV Product here in New York, he lives in Austoria and wants stay here for couples of years but he finds that is difficult to live in this City becacuse is more expensive and the people are colder than his country.
we discuss about our goals, he want become a writer and he is interested by other culture and share wit 

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correction:

1. I studies in Laguardia Commuity College, 

-I study at LaGuardia Community College. 

2. I am an international student from Algeria. (period (.) not comma (,) between sentences 1 and 2. 

 3. To day, i meet a new classmate from Japan 

-Today I have met a new classmate from Japan. 

his name is TOMOTA, he came from Tokyo 3 years ago for working in TV Product here in New York, 

-His name is Tomota. He came from Tokyo three years ago to work in TV production here in New York. (Be careful to separate sentences with periods (.) not commas (,). If you prefer to connect the sentences with commas, you need conjunctions ("and," "but,"  "so" etc.)

he lives in Austoria and wants stay here for couples of years but he finds that is difficult to live in this City becacuse is more expensive and the people are colder than his country.

-He lives in Astoria and wants to stay here for a couple of years, but he finds that it is difficult to live in this city because it is more expensive and the people are colder than in his country. 

(Be careful of punctuation and capital letters (city is not a name; New York City is a name)

we discuss about our goals, he want become a writer and he is interested by other culture and share w...

-We discussed our goals. He wants to become a writer, and he is interested in other cultures and shares..

About my partner Soren:

1. Soren lives and works in Queens.

2. He has been there for 15 years.

3. Soren plans to stay in New York for all his life.

4. He worries about his english, he really like to be bilinguan.

5. Last year he and his family went to Colombia.

6. Before he came to New York, Soren had lived in Colombia.

7. His goal is to be a great dad and husband.

8. If Soren were Obama, he would like to change the emigrations politic.

About myself:

1. I live and work in Queens, NY.

2. I have been here for 6 months.

3. I plan to stay in New York to July.

4. He worries about his english, he really like to be bilinguan.

5. Last year he and his family went to Colombia.

6. Before he came to New York, Soren had lived in Colombia.

7. His goal is to be a great dad and husband.

8. If Soren were Obama, he would like to change the emigrations politic.

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Corrections:

1. Soren lives and works in Queens. correct

2. He has been there for 15 years. correct

3. Soren plans to stay in New York for all his life. correct

4. He worries about his english, he really like to be bilinguan.

- He worries about his English. He would really like to be bilingual. 

5. Last year he and his family went to Colombia. correct

6. Before he came to New York, Soren had lived in Colombia. correct

7. His goal is to be a great dad and husband. correct

8. If Soren were Obama, he would like to change the emigrations politic.

--If Soren were Obama, he would like to change the immigration policy. 

About myself:

1. I live and work in Queens, NY. correct

2. I have been here for 6 months. correct

3. I plan to stay in New York to July. correct

4. He worries about his english, he really like to be bilinguan.

He worries about his English. He would really like to be bilingual. 

5. Last year he and his family went to Colombia. correct

6. Before he came to New York, Soren had lived in Colombia. correct

7. His goal is to be a great dad and husband. correct

8. If Soren were Obama, he would like to change the emigrations politic.

(see the correction for number 8 above. It's the same)

Good morning!

Work with your partner. Write about you and your partner. Use the story of Obama as an example. Write both your name and your partner's.


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Notice there are 8 sentences (so you should write 8 about you and 8 about your partner).

1.Obama lives and works in Washington. 
2. He has been there for over six years. 
3. Obama plans to stay in Washington a short time. 
4. He worries every day about problems in the world, such as Ebola.  
5. Last year he and his family went to Hawaii. 
6. Before he came to Washington, Obama had lived in Chicago. 
7. His goal is to be a good president. 
8. If I were Obama, I would give more money to Laguardia Community College. 

EXAMPLE: My classmate Mark lives and works in New York. He has been here for over five decades. He plans to stay in New York a long time. He worries every day about problems in New York, such as the high cost of living. Last year he and his family went to Miami for vacation. Before he came to New York, Mark had lived in Canada. His goal is to be a good husband and father and work as an optometrist. If he were Obama, he would make college free for all students. 


Start by clicking the PENCIL ICON (picture of a pencil). 

If you have questions, ask Kevin. 

My name is Jantima and my nickname Beau


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Welcome, Jantima. Let's enjoy learning. As you know, I'm sure, learning comes naturally. It's something people do, like eating, sleeping, playing sports. The more relaxed you are, the more you will learn. English is an international language. Proficiency in English provides opportunities in this country and around the world. So your choice to study and improve your skill is an excellent one. 

hey everybody .... you want live a dangerous experience or funny come with me loool is joke
i introduce my sekf

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Hey. I'm trying to guess your name but can't. I can see you have a sense of humor. That will help you learn English quickly, and it will also help your classmates. 

HELLO ,THANK YOU HELP

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You're very welcome. I look forward to helping you progress in English.

Hello guys my name is ANUPHON MANEEROAT but you can call me" TOM" it's easier .Edwin is my partner today.


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Hello. Welcome to class. By working together and individually, students can learn a lot quickly. The teacher also learns. 

Hi i am Carlos

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Nice to meet you, Carlos. My first impression is that you have an active style of learning. That's great. 

Hi Anuphon.

Welcom at the class. Nice meet you.

My name is Edwin. I am from Colombia.

Good luck with the new English program in Laguardia school. I am safe we are going learn an excellent English.

Bay Anuphon.


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Nice to meet you, Edwin. I am sure you and Anuphon are going to learn a lot. The important thing is making good habits for grammar and pronunciation. Continuing the habits results in progress. Listening is also important, of course. 

Hallo Sandra? Nice to meet you. I'm Anna, I'm from Poland. And you?

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Hello, Anna. Nice to meet you. You were active and participated a lot in the first class. That's key to learning. I want to help make it easy for you to be active and learn a lot.

As we discussed, you have a very independent mind. That's a great thing and rare. 

Jantima say hi Frhancesca

Hi Frhancesca ,How are you?
My name is Jantima and You can call my nickname is "Beau" :)


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Hi Jantima. "Beau" is a good nickname. I think it is the French word for "beautiful." Nice to meet you. When you don't understand something- or if I talk too quickly- please don't be shy. Feel free to ask questions in class.
 

Hi.. Good Morning, I'm so happy to get my first class. Learning English is something interesting for me, but I always nervous to speak in it.


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Nice to meet you (although I'm not sure of your name). Sometimes if you are nervous, you learn more quickly because you have a lot of energy and focus. But I will encourage you to relax. Don't worry about making mistakes when you speak. You can learn from mistakes. 

Hello Anna

my name is sandra v ortiz

nice to meet you

have great day


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Nice to meet you, Sandra. This is a great group of students. We can make every Saturday a great day and learn English well and quickly. 

hi nice to seyou

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Nice to see you too.  Please feel free to ask questions in class. Talk a lot. Speak only English. You will make strong progress. 

Hi!

           My name is Paulina. I wish succession and improving our English!


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Nice to meet you, Paulina. Your wish for success and improving your English is the best reason to come to Saturday class.  Putting a wish into action is a great project. I will help you. Please don't be shy. If you have questions or don't understand, please feel free to ask me. 

Hello!!!

                      


                     Hello,


My name is Lisa. I am very happy to starting class today. I wish everything is going well. Good luck everybody.

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Nice to meet you, Lisa. I think everything will go well. The class is full of intelligent, motivated students. Working together, you and your classmates can achieve a lot. 

Hi I'm Yaneth Cardona ,Im from Colombia

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Greetings, Yaneth. Welcome to level 4, the high intermediate class. It is a great level because you can advance to more interesting topics while improving grammar, pronunciation, writing and reading and listening and fluency. The key is to speak only English- and to participate actively. Ask questions. 

Hi ! I'm Natalia.

Hi.
My Name is Natalia.
I'm 27 years old.
I'm from Poland.
Now Im stydy and working in New York.
Nice to meet You!

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Nice to meet you, Natalia. You are twenty-seven, study and work in New York. This is a good time to learn English. You are surrounded by English and can learn quickly with the right guidance. 

Hello nice to meet you

Hello
My name is Tomota.
I'm from Japan.
Nice to meet you!

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Nice to meet you, Tomota. You did very well in the first class. You participated actively. That's the key. Language is communication. Welcome. Relax and enjoy learning new things.

Hello everyone!!

Hi!! I'm Diana from Colombia, I hope to improve my English. Take care!!


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Nice to meet you, Diana. Your sentences are perfect: grammar, spelling and punctuation. You clearly have the basics and are in a good position to make progress in English. The more you participate, the faster you will learn. Welcome. Ask questions. 

My name is Frhancesca.Good morning everybody

Nice to meet you, Frhancesca. You have a good opportunity in this class, because you speak a language other students don't know (maybe two or three know French). You will learn to communicate more clearly in English. That ability will give you more power and choices for the future. 

Welcome to winter class

It's winter. It's cold. That's a perfect time to concentrate on learning. You can learn a lot quickly in winter. The important thing is to practice as much as you can, speak and listen. Try not to translate. English only is the best way to learn fast.

Welcome! This class is fun. You also learn fastest if you enjoy yourself with your classmates and teacher.