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Alfredo Quinones came to U.S. at 1970.
Alfredo Quinones came to the U.S. in 1970.
Most names of countries that have more than one word begin with "the"
example:
The People's Republic of China
The Dominican Republic
The United States
He was born in Mexico, his first job at 5 age in the gas station with father.
This is 2 sentences, so there should be a period (.) at the end of the first sentence, after Mexico. And the "h" in "his" should be capitalized (His) because it is the start of a new sentence.
5 age should be the reverse, age 5.
"at age five" should be between commas (,). If there are no commas, it looks like Alfredo worked at more than one job at age five!
His first job, at age five,....
The second sentence should have a verb. "Was" is a good choice.
the gas station should be a gas station because there is not only one gas station in Mexico.
His first job, at age 5, was in a gas station with his father.
He was born in Mexico. His first job, at age 5, was in a gas station with his father.
When he moved to the USA, his first job was farm worker,
USA should be U.S.A.
The sentence is complete and should end with a period (.), not a comma (,)
When he moved to the U.S.A., his first job was farm worker.
He lived in trailer.
Before "trailer," there should be an indefinite article (a or an).
He lived in a trailer.
the trailer was broken-down.
The sentence should start with a capital letter.
The trailer was broken-down.
His job was to pick up tomatoes and cottons.
"Pick up" should be only "pick," a verb specific to agriculture.
"cotton" is not countable. It can't be plural.
His job was to pick tomatoes and cotton.
Next, Alfredo went to study English in community college in University California,
This is a complete sentence and should end with a period, not a comma.
There should be an indefinite article (a or an) before "community college."
The c in community should be a small c, not capital, because it is not a name.
"University California" should be "The University of California." It is like Cuny, the City University of New York.
Next, Alfredo went to study English in a community college in the University of California.
then he studied Medicine in Harvard Now, Alfredo is professor and Doctor of brain cancer.
The sentence should begin with a capital letter.
Medicine is not a name, so it should not begin with a capital letter.
Doctor is not a name, so it also should not begin with a capital letter (unless you attach it to a person, as in Doctor Hinojosa.
Those are 2 sentences. There should be a period at the end of the first and a capital letter at the beginning of the second. You can find it
There should be an indefinite article before professor (a professor)
Then he studied medicine in Harvard. Now, Alfredo is a professor and doctor of brain cancer.
Alfredo Quinones came to the U.S. in 1970.
Most names of countries that have more than one word begin with "the"
example:
The People's Republic of China
The Dominican Republic
The United States
He was born in Mexico, his first job at 5 age in the gas station with father.
This is 2 sentences, so there should be a period (.) at the end of the first sentence, after Mexico. And the "h" in "his" should be capitalized (His) because it is the start of a new sentence.
5 age should be the reverse, age 5.
"at age five" should be between commas (,). If there are no commas, it looks like Alfredo worked at more than one job at age five!
His first job, at age five,....
The second sentence should have a verb. "Was" is a good choice.
the gas station should be a gas station because there is not only one gas station in Mexico.
His first job, at age 5, was in a gas station with his father.
He was born in Mexico. His first job, at age 5, was in a gas station with his father.
When he moved to the USA, his first job was farm worker,
USA should be U.S.A.
The sentence is complete and should end with a period (.), not a comma (,)
When he moved to the U.S.A., his first job was farm worker.
He lived in trailer.
Before "trailer," there should be an indefinite article (a or an).
He lived in a trailer.
the trailer was broken-down.
The sentence should start with a capital letter.
The trailer was broken-down.
His job was to pick up tomatoes and cottons.
"Pick up" should be only "pick," a verb specific to agriculture.
"cotton" is not countable. It can't be plural.
His job was to pick tomatoes and cotton.
Next, Alfredo went to study English in community college in University California,
This is a complete sentence and should end with a period, not a comma.
There should be an indefinite article (a or an) before "community college."
The c in community should be a small c, not capital, because it is not a name.
"University California" should be "The University of California." It is like Cuny, the City University of New York.
Next, Alfredo went to study English in a community college in the University of California.
then he studied Medicine in Harvard Now, Alfredo is professor and Doctor of brain cancer.
The sentence should begin with a capital letter.
Medicine is not a name, so it should not begin with a capital letter.
Doctor is not a name, so it also should not begin with a capital letter (unless you attach it to a person, as in Doctor Hinojosa.
Those are 2 sentences. There should be a period at the end of the first and a capital letter at the beginning of the second. You can find it
There should be an indefinite article before professor (a professor)
Then he studied medicine in Harvard. Now, Alfredo is a professor and doctor of brain cancer.
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