People we have talked about

Review. Ask your partner:

Who is Bill Gates?

He is the GUY who works AS A computer software designer IN THE FIELD OF computer science IN the state OF Washington.

If you're not sure, check with Google.



Hillary? She's the woman who..

(Remember to use the PAST TENSE where necessary)

Steve Jobs

Malala

Mohammad Ali

Dr. Alfredo Hinojosa

Jamie Oliver

Barack Obama

Martin Luther King

Octavio Paz

Leonardo Dicaprio

Michael Jordan ........workED (t!)

Kevin

You

Confident speaking

Please interview your partner about speaking English.

Do you have confidence about your speaking?

What do you do when you want to say a word but can't remember it?

Do you worry about making mistakes when you speak?

Which is stronger for you, grammar or vocabulary?

Can you pronounce this? Mexico's economy collapsed.

And this: kissed a baby

When you stop and are thinking in English, do you say something (like "mm") or do you just stay silent?

Do you worry people will laugh at your English?

Do you think it is okay to speak English with a non-native accent?

ed endings are really important and you have to get it right.

There are 3 ways: t, d, and id (helped, loved, wanted)

walked, moved, expected

Please listen to your partner's pronunciation:

He walked a lot and moved into a new home where he expected to be happier.

Jamie Oliver Two

Jamie Oliver's Ted Speech

http://www.ted.com/talks/jamie_oliver

Jamie Oliver One

We are going to watch a video later. This vocabulary is necessary to understand it.


Work with your partner.

For example: What are "veggies"?

"Veggies" are vegetables.


With your partner, use Google.

No Facebook, music, texting (sorry!)


Your English is better?

Ask your partner:

What is/are..



1. West Virginia

2. Huntington, West Virginia

3. Jamie Oliver

4. food labeling

5. food ingredients

6. processed food

7. food additives

8. obesity

9. obese

9. revolution

10. massive

11. the eye of the storm

12. bullied

13. bury

14. Main Street

15. statistics

16. homicide

17. ain't (this is slang, not in the dictionary)

18. pastor

19. the tipping point

Food Discussion

The three minute speeches

and the test are later.

Let's talk now to practice speaking clearly.


Please say good morning to your partner. Ask the topic of his or her three minute speech.


These are questions about food. Maybe Jamie Oliver would ask them if you talked with him.



Please discuss with your partner:



Do you enjoy eating spicy food?

Do you overeat sometimes?

Did you eat ice cream last night?

Have you eaten ice cream this month?

What flavor do you like?

How long does it take you to eat dinner (answer is: it usually takes me about .... minutes (hours?) to eat dinner)

Do you eat a lot in the hot weather?

How often do you drink water?

Coffee?

Juice?

alcohol?

What is a typical breakfast for you?

How long does it take you to eat breakfast? (answer is: it takes me (5 minutes) to eat my breakfast. (try this grammar)

How long does it take you to eat dinner?

Do you wash the dishes right after you eat or do you wait?

Do you sometimes enjoy a hamburger?

differ in terms of

You can compare your country and your partner's with "differ in terms of."


Grammar: differ in terms of

Japan and the United States differ a lot in terms of population. While the population of Japan is about 127 million, that of the U.S. is over 300 million.

Japan and the United States differ a little in terms of infant mortality. While the infant mortality rate in the U.S. is 5.2 per thousand, that of Japan is 2.17 per  thousand.

Agnes, Akesksandra and Karina

Look at the original sentences and corrections


original: Dr. Alfredo Hinojosa came to the United States when he have 16 years old.

Change have to was.

original: His first job in the U.S. was a migrant farm worker.

Correct!

original: He is from small town name Mexicali that is a border of Mexico and California.

Correction: He is from a small town named Mexicali that is on the border of Mexico and California.

original: When he was six years old Alfredo's have his first job at his father's gas station.

Change "Alfredo's" to "Alfredo."

Change "have" to "had"

original: Now Alfredo is a neurosurgeon and cancer Resercher and Profesor at Johns Hopkins University.

"Resercher" and "Profesor" are misspelled. Also, they should not begin with capital letters.

from Zunilda, Alinton and Anadelfa

Alfredo Hinojosa

20 years ago He came frome mexico.


There is a spelling mistake.

"He" is not a name, so the "h" should not be capital (he)


Mexico is a name, so the "M" should be capital (M)



20 years ago he came from Mexico.


He was five years old He worked in his father small gas station


This should be one sentence connected with the "conjunction" when


When he was five years old He worked in his father small gas station,

But that is still incorrect.

The "He" in the middle should not have a capital "H." It is not a name.

"father" is possessive. It should end with "apostrophe s" (father's)


That's a complete sentence, so it should end with a period, not a comma.



When he was five years old, he worked in his father's small gas station.



In 1970 Mexico economic went down,


"economic" is an adjective that modifies a noun (for example: economic crisis, economic resurgence, economic problems)

The noun is "economy."

The correct form is "the Mexican economy" or "the economy of Mexico."

That is a complete sentence, so it should end with a period.



In 1970 the economy of Mexico went down.



he was 18 years old and he worked a teacher.



The sentence should start with a capital letter.


There should be a comma before "and"


"as" should be between "work" and "a teacher." (as a teacher)




He was 18 years old, and he worked as a teacher.



But the money he made wasn't enought for take care his family.


There is one misspelled word.


"for take care" should be "to take care"


"take care his family" should be "take care of his family)




But the money he made wasn't enough to take care of his family.



that's why he decided to come to u.s.


The sentence should begin with a capital letter.

"He" is not a name, so the "h" should not be capital.


If the name of a country is more than one word, it usually begins with "the."


The U.S.

The Czech Republic

The People's Republic of China


Also, The U.S. is the name of a country, so "U.S." should be capitalized.




He decided to come to the U.S.



His first job in u.s. was farmworker,


This is a complete sentence, so it should end with a period, not a comma


"u.s." should be "The U.S."




His first job in the U.S. was farmworker.



He pick up tomatoes, cotton, cantaloup.


"pick up" should be only "pick," a verb with a specific application to agriculture.


He picked up his shoes.

He picked up his daughter at school.


but: He picked vegetables.



In the sentence "pick" should be simple past tense (picked)


There is one misspelled word in the sentence.


If the sentence has a list, there should be a comma before the last item (tomatoes, cotton and cantaloupe)



He picked  tomatoes, cotton and cantaloupes.



His cousin told him you going to do that for the Rest of you life.


"Rest" is not a name, so the "r" should not be capital.



"you going to" should be "you are going to"


'you life" is a possessive construction. "you" should be possessive "your"



The spoken part of the sentence should be separated by a comma and quotation marks (') and should begin with a capital letter



His cousin told him, "You are going to do that for the rest of your life."




and then he thougth is time to move and started to stury English.


It's a sentence, so it should start with a capital letter.


There are 2 misspelled words.


The verb should be "move on," which has a different meaning than "move."

"Move on" means finishing something and beginning something new.

example:

After the argument, they agreed to move on.


He graduated from high school and moved on.




"he thought is time" is missing a subject. (it is time)


But the sentence is past tense, so it should be "it was time."



Then he thought it was time to move on and started to study English.

from Gladys, Yohana and Mariana

Alfredo Hinojosa is a Mexican Immigrant who came to United States twenty years ego.

Ego should be "ago."


Immigrant is not a name, so the first i should not be capital. It should be "immigrant."

When the name of a country is more than one word, there is usually "the" before it.

The United States

The Republic of South Korea

The United Kingdom


Alfredo Hinojosa is a Mexican immigrant who came to the United States twenty years ago.


His first job was Farmer Worker.

It should be "farm worker," and because it is not a name it should have no capital letters.


His first job was farm worker.



He studied English in a Community College,


That is a complete sentence. It should end with a period (.), not a comma (.)


Community College is a type of college, not the name of a particular college, so it should have no capital letters (community college).



He studied English in a community college.


after that Alfredo started to study Medicine in Harvard Medical School.


This is a complete sentence. It should begin with a capital letter

There should be a comma before "Alfredo."


"Medicine' is not a name, so there should not be a capital letter (medicine is correct).




After that, Alfredo started to study medicine in Harvard Medical School.



Alfredo Hinojosa, who is profesor in the University of California, is looking for a breakthrough in the treatment of brain Cancer.

Excellent construction.

"profesor" is misspelled. (professor)

There should be an indirect object (a or an) before professor (a professor)



Alfredo Hinojosa, who is a professor in the University of California, is looking for a breakthrough in the treatment of cancer.



Alfredo says he owes so much of his success to the many people who have extended a hand to him throughout his life.


That's correct.

from Jaime, Arminda, Erica and Janaina

Alfredo Quinones came to U.S. at 1970.

Alfredo Quinones came to the U.S. in 1970.

Most names of countries that have more than one word begin with "the"

example:

The People's Republic of China

The Dominican Republic

The United States



He was born in Mexico, his first job at 5 age in the gas station with father.

This is 2 sentences, so there should be a period (.) at the end of the first sentence, after Mexico. And the "h" in "his" should be capitalized (His) because it is the start of a new sentence.

5 age should be the reverse, age 5.

"at age five" should be between commas (,). If there are no commas, it looks like Alfredo worked at more than one job at age five!


His first job, at age five,....

The second sentence should have a verb. "Was" is a good choice.


the gas station should be a gas station because there is not only one gas station in Mexico.

His first job, at age 5, was  in a gas station with his father.


He was born in Mexico. His first job, at age 5, was in a gas station with his father.


When he moved to the USA, his first job was farm worker,


USA should be U.S.A.

The sentence is complete and should end with a period (.), not a comma (,)



When he moved to the U.S.A., his first job was farm worker.


He lived in trailer.

Before "trailer," there should be an indefinite article (a or an).



He lived in a trailer.



the trailer was broken-down.


The sentence should start with a capital letter.


The trailer was broken-down.

His job was to pick up tomatoes and cottons.

"Pick up" should be only "pick," a verb specific to agriculture.

"cotton" is not countable. It can't be plural.


His job was to pick tomatoes and cotton.


Next, Alfredo went to study English in community college in University California,


This is a complete sentence and should end with a period, not a comma.

There should be an indefinite article (a or an) before "community college."

The c in community should be a small c, not capital, because it is not a name.


"University California" should be "The University of California." It is like Cuny, the City University of New York.


Next, Alfredo went to study English in a community college in the University of California.



then he studied Medicine in Harvard Now, Alfredo is professor and Doctor of brain cancer.


The sentence should begin with a capital letter.

Medicine is not a name, so it should not begin with a capital letter.

Doctor is not a name, so it also should not begin with a capital letter (unless you attach it to a person, as in Doctor Hinojosa.

Those are 2 sentences. There should be a period at the end of the first and a capital letter at the beginning of the second. You can find it


There should be an indefinite article before professor (a professor)


Then he studied medicine in Harvard. Now, Alfredo is a professor and doctor of brain cancer.

from Luis, Ingrid, Guillermo and Sandra

Alfredo come from Mexico to the U.S. of America, because crisis Mexico in 1970, and he was very poor.

"Come" should be past form, "came."

"the U.S. of America" is a mix of forms.

There are three corrections possible.

1. the U.S.A.

2. The United States of America

3. the U.S.


There should not be a comma (,) before "because"

because crisis Mexico

changes to: there was an economic crisis in Mexico

Alfredo came from Mexico to the U.S. because there was an economic crisis in Mexico in 1970, and he was very poor.

When he was five years old, he was worked with his father, in gas station.

Thee should not be a comma after father.

The verb "work" should be "simple past tense"

He worked.

There should be an "indefinite article" (a or an) before "gas station."

When he was five years old, he worked with his father in a gas station.

Alfredo was an ilegaly farm worker and he didn't speak english.

"illegally" is an adverb. "Illegal" is an adjective modifying the "noun phrase" "farm worker."

There should be a comma before "and."

English is the name of a language and should begin with a "capital letter."


Alfredo was an illegal farm worker, and he didn't speak English.

When he was 18 years old, he studied in community college ESL english.


There should be an indefinite article before "community college."

a community college.

ESL is English as a Second Language, so ESL ENGLISH is repetitive.

The place usually comes after the "verb" and object" (verb= studied, object= ESL
place= in a community college


studied ESL in a community college


When he was 18 years old, he studied ESL in a community college.



A teacher said to Alfredo, find a scholarships in Berkeley University, where Alfredo developed a passion for the scientific method.

There should be quotation marks " " around the spoken part.

Scholarships should be singular, scholarship

Berkeley is a college, not a university. It is part of the University of California, as LaGuardia is part of the City University of New York (CUNY)


University of California, Berkeley


A teacher said to Alfredo, "You should find a scholarship at the University of California, Berkeley," where Alfredo developed a passion for the scientific method.

After he went to Harvard Medical Center and he received his U.S. citizen.

"After" should be "after that," or "afterward,"

Harvard Medical Center should be Harvard Medical School.

A citizen is a person. The status is citizenship.


Afterward,  he went to Harvard Medical School and he received his U.S. citizenship.


Now, Alfredo is a neurosurgery and teacher in John's Hopkins University.

There shouldn't be an apostrophe (') in Johns

"neurosurgery" is a medical procedure. The doctor who practices it is a "neurosurgeon."


Now, Alfredo is a neurosurgeon and teacher at Johns Hopkins University.

from Rihmet, Jung Eun and Li Zhou

Alfredo Hinojosa

He was bored in Mexican.

He was born in Mexico.

He became a migrant farm worker.

Correct.

Alfredo Hinojosa continued his schooling and became a teacher.

Correct.

Be careful to leave more space between the words you write.

Today he is a neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkins University

Correct, but the sentence needs a period (.) at the end.

Today he is a neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkins University.

He realized it was time to move on

This sentence also lacks a period.


He realized it was time to move on.


Correct

He signed up for English classes at a community college where a teacher encouraged. him to attend the University of California.

Almost correct. There shouldn't be a period after encouraged. This is not two sentences. It is one sentence.


He signed up for English classes at a community college where a teacher encouraged him to attend the University of California.

It's good you made capital letters in all the correct places.

Good morning. Write about your partner. Use the sentence structure we practiced about Obama. 

For example:

Martha, who was born in Bogota, now lives with her family in Astoria. 


This is the Obama example. Please read it again with your partner now. 


Obama


Obama, who was born in Hawaii and is the first African-American to be president, majored in political science and international relations. 

Obama, who is African-American, became the first African-American president, had a double major. 
Obama, who was born in Hawaii in 1961, moved with his family to Indonesia in 1967 and at the age of ten returned to Hawaii. 

Obama, who makes powerful speeches, taught law at the University of Chicago for twelve years and became Illinois senator in 1996. 

Obama, who supported legislation on conservation, energy, immigration and honest leadership, was elected as a U.S. senator in 2004 and made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election as the first African-American to be president. 

Obama, who is serving his second term as U.S. president, said that all army troops will come back before his term in the White House is done. 


Please read all the instructions below with your partner, carefully


First, click on SIGN IN and use our USER NAME: telcblogger@yahoo.com and PASSWORD (it's on the white board. 


To write here, click on the PENCIL ICON (new post). 

Remember to write YOUR NAME and YOUR PARTNER'S NAME in the TITLE SPACE (at the top of this window). 

When you finish, click PUBLISH. If you can't finish, click SAVE. 

Li Zhou and Vigina Majiia

 Barack Obama ,who is the 44th President of the United States of Amarica,is also the winner of the 2009 Noble Peace Prize,made history in 2008 when the U.S. presidential election ,is the first African American to be  President,


This sentence is long. It needs an "and."

 Barack Obama ,who is the 44th President of the United States of America AND also the winner of the 2009 Noble Peace Prize, made history in 2008


After "when" it needs a new subject "he"  and a new verb "won"


 Barack Obama ,who is the 44th President of the United States of America AND also the winner of the 2009 Noble Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when HE WON the U.S. presidential election ,is the first African American to be  President.


But this still isn't correct. The end (is the first African America to be President" can move to the middle. Then you will have 3 actions connected by the AND.

(who-action 1- is the 44th President of the United States, -action 2- the first African American to be president AND-action 3- also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize)

The correct complete sentence is:

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States, the first African American to be President and the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election. 

wilmer and aleksandra

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Barack Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election is the first African American to be President. Obama's, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans has been very successful with his message for change.

After four years in New York, Barack Obama who moved to Chicago, there worked  as the director of a


----

The first paragraph is correct but needs two commas (,). Can you find where?

Try to find the two places where a comma is necessary before you look at the paragraph below, in which I have put the two commas in the correct places.


Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Barack Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Obama's, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

There is another minor error. "Obama's" should be only "Obama" because the next word "whose" has the "possessive marking" (same meaning as the 's in "Obama's").

So the fully correct paragraph is:

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Barack Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Obama, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

There wasn't enough time to finish the second paragraph. The structure has a problem. I suggest you try to fix it before you look at the correction I wrote below. 

original: After four years in New York, Barack Obama who moved to Chicago, there worked  as the director of a

correction: After four years in New York, Barack Obama moved to Chicago, where he worked  as the director of a

Gladys and Erika

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Obama who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President.Obama who is charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

There should be a comma between Obama and who (in two places)

"who is" should change to "whose" (possessive)


The first sentence is correct. The second sentence needs "whose" and a comma after "Obama." I suggest you try to repair it before looking at my correction below.

original: Obama who is charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

correction: Obama, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.


Also, you should leave a space after every period (.)


no space (incorrect): the first African American to be President.Obama

space (correct): the first African American to be President. Obama


That's a very small error, but it's good to eliminate it. 

yatnna guzman and halima ezzara

Barack Obama, who is the 44th  presidente of the united states of america. is also the winner  of the 2009 nobel peace prize, he made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election.

Virginia Mejia with Li Zhou.

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of 2009  nobel peace prize, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election, is the first African American to be president and whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans and has been very successful with his message for change


Most of this is correct, but it is too long and should be separated into 2 sentences.

With the addition of "AND," the first sentence can be:

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America AND also the winner of 2009  nobel peace prize, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election.

Nobel Peace Prize needs capital letters because it is a name.

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America and also the winner of 2009  Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election.


The elements of the second sentence are in this order:


1. is the first African American to be president

2. whose charisma, intelligence and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans

3. has been very successful with his message for change.


It will be correct with these changes:

A. the addition of "Obama, who" at the beginning

B. replace the second "and" with a comma.


original: is the first African American to be president and whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans and has been very successful with his message for change

correction: Obama, who is the first African American to be president and whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.


And remember to put a period after "election" and after "change" because there are now two separate sentences, each needing a period at the end.


Complete correction:

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America and also the winner of 2009  Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election. Obama, who is the first African American to be president and whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

Sandra and Ingrid

BARACK OBAMA.

1.
Barack Obama, Who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the  2009 Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Whos charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans. He has been very successful with his message for change.

3.
After four years in New York, Obama moved to Chicago. There, he worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988. He entered Harvard Law School and became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review.


The "W" in "who" should not be capitalized.

"and" should replace "comma+ is"

The first sentence should end with a period after "Prize" and then a new sentence should begin with he (Prize. He..)

after "when" there should be a new subject and verb ("he" and "won")


original: Barack Obama, Who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the  2009 Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when won the U.S. presidential election


correction: Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America and also the winner of the  2009 Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election.

The next sentence should begin with "Obama + comma+ who

"President. Whos" should  change to "and whose"

"Americans. He has" should change to "Americans, has"


original:  is the first African American to be President. Whos charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans. He has been very successful with his message for change.


correction: Obama, who is the first African American to be President and whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.


Remember to end each sentence with a period. Also, there should be no period after the title:

incorrect title: Barack Obama.

correct title: Barack Obama


The second part of your composition (marked 3) is 100% correct. 

aleksandra and wilmer

BARACK OBAMA

barack obama who is the 44th president of the united states of america.  is also the winner of the 2009 novel peace prize. made history in 2008 when won the U.S presidential election. the first african american to be president. Obama's charisma, intelligence, and powerfull speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans.  has been very successful with his message for change.

After four years in new york, Obama moved to Chicago. There, worked as the director of a community prject from 1985 to 1988. entered harvard law school and became the first black president of the harvard law  re


correction:

"Barack Obama"

Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the United States of America and also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when won the U.S presidential election. Obama, who is the first African American to be president and whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.


There wasn't time to finish work on the second paragraph.

correction:


After four years in New York, Obama moved to Chicago. There, he worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988. He entered Harvard Law School and became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review. 

Alinton and Zunilda

                                                                                                                                                                         Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the united state of America, is also the winner of the
2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Obama made history in 2008 when he won the u.s. Presidential election.


The beginning (above) is correct.



is the first African American to be President. whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches


There wasn't enough time to do more. By adding "whose" and 2 commas and a few more words from the text, you can connect the last sentence at the top with the one at the bottom, to make this correct sentence.




Obama, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with some American people, made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. Presidential election.

ana garcia, guillermo , anadelfa

Barack Obama , who is the 44th president of the united states of america ,who

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States , is also the winner of  the 2009
Nobel peace Prize. Who made history in 2008, who won the U. S. presidential election, also

Luis and Janaina

BARACK OBAMA

Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election. he is the first African American to be President, Obama, who is charisma, inetelligence and powerful speeches, who have  made him extremly popular with many americans, who has been very successful with his message for change

BARACK OBAMA

Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the United States of America,  is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize who, made history in 2008 when he won U.S. presidential election.
He is the first African American to be President. Obam

halima ezzaraii and yatnna gusman

barak obama who is 44  the 44 th presidend of the united s

Guillermo, Anadelfa and Ana

BARACK OBAMA

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, who is the first African American to be President. Obama who is charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches, who have made him extremely popular with many Americans. Who has been very successful with his message for change.

After four years om New York, who moved

Luis and Janaina

Barack Obama

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of United States of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, he is the first African American to be president. Obama, who is charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, who has been very successful with his message for change.

ingrid and sandra

BARACK OBAMA

Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the United State of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize, made history in 2008 when who won the U.S. presidential election, is the first Africa American to be president, who charisma, intelligent and powerful speeches have made extremely popular with many Americans, who has been very successful with who message for change.


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Barack Obama.



Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the united States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Who made history when he wont the U. S. president election, who is the first African American to be president.Obama, who is charisma,intelligence,and powerful speeches,who have made him extremely popular with many Americans. Who has been very successful with his message for change.

After four years in New York,Who moved

karina and agnieszka

Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the U.S of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize.He, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election,is the first African American to be President.Obama, whose charisma,intelligence,and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with Americans,has been very successful with his message for change

Agnieszka

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the U.S. of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. He, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Obama, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.
Obama, who moved to Chicago after four years in New York, worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988. Obama, who entered Harvard Law School and became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review, taught law at the Uniwersity of Chicago Law School for twelve years. Obama, who became an Illinois Senator in 1996, in 2004 was elected as a U.S. Senator. Obama, who has supported legislation on conservation, energy, immigration and honest leadership, is currently battling with serious issues such as the economy, the global credit crisis and wars in Iraq and Afghanistan. Obama, who won the Nobel Peace Prize for his "extraordinary efforts to strengthen international diplomacy and cooperation between peoples".

Erika and Gladys

Barack Obama, who is the 44th president of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Obama, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, who has been very successful with his message for chance.

After four years in New York, Obama, who moved to Chicago, worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988.
Obama who entered Harvard Law School and became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review, taught law at University of Chicago Law School for twelve years, who became an Illinois Senator in 1996.

Obama, who was elected as U.S. Senator in 2004, supported legislation on conversation, energy, immigration an honest leadership. Obama who is currently battling with serious issues such as the economy, the global credit crisis and wars in Iraq and Afghanistan, won the Nobel Peace Prize for his "extraordinary efforts to strengthen international diplomacy and cooperation between peoples."

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Barack Obama


 Barack Obama,who is the 44th
President of the U.S of America,is also the winner of the
 2009 Noble Peace Prize.He,who made history in 2008 when he
 won the U.S presidential election,is the first African
 American to be President.Obama,whose
 charisma,intelligence,and powerful speeches have made him
 extremely popular with many Americans,has been very
 successful with his messages for change


correction:

He,who made history in 2008 when he
 won the U.S presidential election,is the first African
 American to be President.


- The structure of your sentence is correct, but in general you can't use a pronoun (he, she, it, etc.) in this situation.


The correction is: Obama, who made history in 2008 when he  won the U.S presidential election, is the first African American to be president.

There should be a period (.) at the end of the last sentence. Minor but necessary.



 After having been in New York for four years he
 moved to Chicago and worked as the director of a community
 project from 1985 to 1988.


There should be a comma (,) after "years. The structure of the sentence you wrote is perfect.


Then he entered Harvard Law School
 and became the first black president of the Harvard Law
 Review. Obama taught law at the University of Chicago Law
 School for twelve years and then become an Illinois Senator
 in 1996 In 2004.

The structure of the  two sentences is also 100% correct, but the verb "become" should be past tense. "Become" is the base form.


He was elected as a U.S Senator,and has supported legislation on
 conservation,energy,immigration and honest leadership,which
 is currently battling with serious issues such as the
 economy,the global credit crisis and war in Iran and
 Afghanistan.

There should not be a comma after Senator because the subject (he) is the same in the first part of the sentence and the second part.

This is correct: He was elected as a U.S Senator and has supported legislation on....

 If you use "he" again (repeat the subject, you can use a comma.

This way is also correct: He was elected as a U.S Senator, and  he has supported legislation on... (notice ", and HE has..)

The "which" is incorrect. Remember, "which" is for things not people. A solution is to omit "which" and the comma (because now there is no new subject):

This is correct: conservation,energy,immigration and honest leadership and is currently battling with serious issues such as the
 economy,the global credit crisis and war in Iran and Afghanistan.

But again, your sentence demonstrates understanding of the complex construction.

Obama won the Nobel Peace Prize for his extraordinary efforts to strengthen international diplomacy
 and cooperation between peoples


That one is also perfect, except for the absence of a period at the end. Punctuation is important. Speaking and writing are different, as you know. You speak well and with practice your writing will catch up with your speaking and may even advance beyond it.

Zunilda and Alinton

Barack Obama,who is the 44th president of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize.Obama,  made history in 2008 when he won the U.S presidential election. He is the first African American to be President. His charisma,intelligence,and powerful speeches have been extremely popular with many Americans. He has been very successful with his message for change.


Obama,who moved to Chicago after four years in New York,worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988. He entered Harvard Law School and became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review and he taught law at the University  of Chicago Law School for twelve years. He became an Illinois senator in 1996.


Obama , who was elected as a U.S.Senator in 2004. He supported legislation on conservation, energy,immigration,and honest leadership,is currently battling with serious issues such as the economy,the global credit crisis and wars in Iraq and Afghanistan. Obama won the Nobel Peace Prize for his extraordinary efforts to strengthen international diplomacy and cooperation between people.

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Zunilda and Alinton,

This is well done. The sentences are constructed well. There is only one error that I can find. In the fourth paragraph, there should be "and" between "leadership" and "is currently battling."

Another minor suggestion  is that you leave a space between a comma and the next word. For example,  "the economy,the global credit crisis" should be "the economy, the global credit crisis."

Overall, your writing- your transformation of the article from class- looks professional quality, which is needed for success in a career using English.

For other students, remember that it isn't necessary to do all four paragraphs. I recommend just one, three and four. Skipping number two is okay, but including it is fine too.

I recommend in addition that you write about yourself here as you wrote about your partner. That isn't homework but a good idea if you have extra time- good practice and we would all like to read it.