Saturday, April 30, 2016

wilmer and aleksandra

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Barack Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election is the first African American to be President. Obama's, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans has been very successful with his message for change.

After four years in New York, Barack Obama who moved to Chicago, there worked  as the director of a


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The first paragraph is correct but needs two commas (,). Can you find where?

Try to find the two places where a comma is necessary before you look at the paragraph below, in which I have put the two commas in the correct places.


Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Barack Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Obama's, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

There is another minor error. "Obama's" should be only "Obama" because the next word "whose" has the "possessive marking" (same meaning as the 's in "Obama's").


So the fully correct paragraph is:

Barack Obama, who is the 44th President of the United States of America, is also the winner of the 2009 Nobel Peace Prize. Barack Obama, who made history in 2008 when he won the U.S. presidential election, is the first African American to be President. Obama, whose charisma, intelligence, and powerful speeches have made him extremely popular with many Americans, has been very successful with his message for change.

There wasn't enough time to finish the second paragraph. The structure has a problem. I suggest you try to fix it before you look at the correction I wrote below. 


original: After four years in New York, Barack Obama who moved to Chicago, there worked  as the director of a


correction: After four years in New York, Barack Obama moved to Chicago, where he worked  as the director of a



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