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There are 4 people in our group, all of us are females. The maximum age is 48, the minimum age is 25 and the average age is 37. Students in our group have the following occupations: consultant, security officer and two factory workers. We are all students now.

We come from a total of 4 countries and represent 3 continents, Europe, South America and Asia.  3 languages are spoken by our group: Polish, Spanish and Chinese.

The largest hometown represented in our group is Baoutou, China, with a population of 4 million. The smallest hometown is Canar, Ecuador, with a population of 1200.

Our marital status is varied. One person is single and the other three are married.

Three of us live with family and another one lives with her fiance.

The person in my group who has been in New York the longest is Teresa, who came here 15years ago. By contrast, I have been here just more than two years. The average length of time in New York is about 7 year.

We all feel very lucky to know each other in this class and we are sure the future English exploration will benefit us a lot.

Tingting


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Tingting,

Thanks for sharing your writing here. 

I see a punctuation problem. The technical word for it is "comma splice." The first sentence has one. 

"There are 4 people in our group, all of us are females" has incorrect punctuation. There are at least three ways to correct it. 

You could make two separate sentences:

A. "There are 4 people in our group." All of us are females."

It's also possible to keep the comma by using a conjunction. 

B. "There are 4 people in our group, and all of us are females. 

Another- and maybe the most effective way- is to use an adjective clause. 

C. There are 4 people in our group, all of whom are females.

In the second paragraph, you should introduce a list with a colon (:), not with a comma (,). You used the correct one with languages but not with continents. 

When you write numbers with four digits or more, you need to use commas. 

1000 is incorrect. 1,000 is correct. 

Other than those very minor punctuation errors, the writing is error-free.