TATIANA ZAMUDIO AND JENIFFER PENA

Jeniffer and Tatiana,

Thanks for the writing about Tatiana. Her favorite subject is literature. That's great. Now she reads books- maybe in her favorite place,  her grandmother's bed. Maybe in the future she will write books. Maybe she has already written some.

Please look at my NEW VERSION of your writing below. There are some CHANGES in CAPITAL LETTERS.


NEW VERSION:


I would like to introduce you to a new student. Her name is Tatiana. Her mother is A treasury coordinator and his father is IN CHARGE OF cleaning of beaches. Her mother is 53 years old and HER father 52 years old. HER parents are strict. HER favorite subject is literature because she likes reading many books. She came to New York to study ENGLISH FOR a new career. She is going to stay here until SHE finishES HER education.  If SHE FINDS a good job or startS a family, SHE may stay here forever. She likeS New York but  is living away. HER  favorite place in the world is HER grandmother'S bed because IT is the place perfect FOR HER. She sometimes textS while she is walking.


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(original version)

I would like to introduce you to a new student. Her name is Tatiana. Her mother is treasury coordinator and his father is cleaning of beaches. Her mother is 53 years old and his father 52 years old. Your parents are strict. Your favorite subject is literature because she likes reading many books. She came to New York to study a new career as English. She is going to stay here until finish you education.  If you find a good job or start a family, you may stay here forever. She like New York but bat is living away. You favorite place in the world is the grandmother bed because is the place perfect to she. She sometimes text while she is walking.