Carmen Vergara

Carmen,

Thanks for writing about your partner Lucy, who has traveled around the world. Her ideas about New York are informed by experiences of many other places.

Please take a look at the NEW VERSION of your writing below. It has some CHANGES in CAPITAL LETTERS. See the differences and learn from them.



(new version)

My classmate's name is Luci Martinez. She is from Peru. Her mother is dead and her father is retired.

HER father liveS in Peru. Her father is 94 years old.Her father is very lenient. HE IS ALWAYS peaceful.

HER favorite subject was history because she likeS KNOWING about the history OF her country.  She CAME to New York to START a new life. She PLANS to stay in NY for one year, and THEN she will come TO her country. She likeS N.Y. because IT is a beautiful AND big city. HER favorite place in the world is VENICE. She always TEXTS while she is walking,  but she never TEXTS while she stayS relaxing.

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(original version)

My classmate's name is Luci Martinez. She is from Peru. Her mother is dead and her father is retired.
her father live in Peru. Her father is 94 years old.Her father is very lenient, he always is peaceful.
She favorite subject was history because she like about the history her country.She come to New York to a new life.She planes to stay in NY for one year and she will come her country.She like NY because is a beautiful an big city.She favorite place in the world is Venetian.She always text while she is walking,but she never text while she stay relaxing.