Juan Felipe Sierra and Francisco Aviles

Juan Felipe,

Thank you for writing about your partner. Everyone is different. It is the variety of people that makes our class fun. It also gives a lot of opportunities to learn new things.

Please look at the NEW VERSION of your writing below. To make the CHANGES easy to see, I have written them in CAPITAL LETTERS.

(new version)

FRANCISCO'S (Don't forget "apostrophe" before possessive "s")  parents lives in Medellin. They (You should end every sentence with a PERIOD and start every sentence with a CAPITAL LETTER)

have restaurants there. HIS (You should end every sentence with a PERIOD and start every sentence with a CAPITAL LETTER) father is 63 years old,  and his mother is 56 years old. He SAID that his parents are so strict and his favorite subject when he WAS in the high school was GYM. Francisco CAME to N.Y.C. looking for a better job and he is PLANNING TO LIVE the rest of his life here. HE (You should end every sentence with a PERIOD and start every sentence with a CAPITAL LETTER) thinks that N.Y.C .is a good city to find new opportunities and start a new life   

Francisco SAID that his FAVORITE (not "favorites." In English, "adjectives" are never plural) place in the world is his bed. He never textS when he walks because he IS USED TO WALKING.   ("is used to walking" means "is accustomed to walking." I'm not sure that is what you meant, but it is a suggestion). 

(original version)

Franciscos parents lives in Medellin,they have restaurants there his father is 63 years old and his mother is 56 years old.He saw that his parents are so strict and his favorite subject when he were in the high school was GYM.Francisco come to NYC looking for a better job and he is planing live the rest of his life here.he thinks that NYC is a good city to find new opportunities and start a new life  
Francisco saw that his favorites place in the world is his bed.He never text when he walks because he use to walk.