Maria Catalina and Francisco,

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Maria Catalina and Francisco (with changes)

My partner is Francisco. HIS parents LIVE in Medellin. Hir father and HIS mother are traders. HIS father is 63 years old and HIS mother is 56 years old. HIS parents are very strict. The favorite subject in HIS highschool was gym because he DID A LOT OF  exerCise. Francisco came to New York for learning English and to work. Hir plan is stay in New York for A long time, maybe forever. HE likeS New York for ITS big BUSINESS and opportunities. HIS favorite place in the world is HIS house because IT is HIS place TO rest. And Francisco sometimes textS while walking.

Maria Catalina and Francisco (original)

My partner is Francisco, hir parents living in Medellin. Hir father and hir mother are traders. Hir fathers is 63 years old and hir mother is 56 years old. Hir parents are very strict. The favorite subject in hir highschool was gym because he has that make very exersise. Francisco came to New York for learning English and to work. Hir plan is stay in New York for long time, maybe forever. Her like New York for your big bussines and opportunities. Hir favorite place in the world is hir house because is hir place for rest. And Francisco sometimes text while walking.