Francisco and Juan Felipe,

Your writing is interesting. Your parents have interesting jobs. Please look at the new version of your writing below. I have made some CHANGES in CAPITAL LETTERS.

(new version)

JUAN'S parents LIVE in Bogota. The father is A police officer and his mother is AN English teacher. His father is 41 years old and his mother is 42 years old.His father is very strict and his mother is very sweet. JUAN'S favorite subject in  the school was music. He came to New York  TO  study English. HE WILL stay in New York until HE FINISHES HIS education. HE LIKES New York because IT is a big city.

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(original version)

Francisco Aviles and Juan Felipe Sierra.

Juanes parents lives in Bogota.The father is Police officer and his mother is English teacher.His father is 41 years old and his mother is 42 years old.His father is very strict and his mother is very sweet.Juan favorite subject in  the school was music.He came to New York  for study English.Hi stay in New York until hi finish yours education.Hi like New York because is a big city.