Takahiro Tomura
Takahiro,
The top version is your original and the bottom version is the corrected version:
He is 18 years old and he moved to new york from Australia.
He has been living long island because he wants to work at wine vineyard. His dream is to be making vineyard. So he was studying getting vine knowledge and finance management to sell wine.
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He is 18 years old and he moved to New York from Australia.
He has been living on Long Island because he wants to work at a wine vineyard. His dream is to make a vineyard. So he was studying to get vine knowledge and finance management to sell wine.
The top version is your original and the bottom version is the corrected version:
He is 18 years old and he moved to new york from Australia.
He has been living long island because he wants to work at wine vineyard. His dream is to be making vineyard. So he was studying getting vine knowledge and finance management to sell wine.
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He is 18 years old and he moved to New York from Australia.
He has been living on Long Island because he wants to work at a wine vineyard. His dream is to make a vineyard. So he was studying to get vine knowledge and finance management to sell wine.
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