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This is about my partner whose name is Jose. He works four days a week. His house and job are in Queens. He has been working there for one year but he had many experiences working at his place. Before he moved to New York, he had lived in Mexico. He is single and does not have a girl friend. I think that he really enjoys his free time before becoming to be a hushand and father. He wants to get a better job that is why he is attending this class.
Jose has a big family but he has lived alone since he came here. He has four younger sisters and one younger brother. He said that when he felt lonely or missed family, he usually goes to theather or goes to the Gym to throw away his feelings. Horror moives are the most favorite genre.
After studying in here, when he learned a lot of money, he wants to go back to his country to live his family together. This is the most priorities of his dreams in his life.
Jose has a big family but he has lived alone since he came here. He has four younger sisters and one younger brother. He said that when he felt lonely or missed family, he usually goes to theather or goes to the Gym to throw away his feelings. Horror moives are the most favorite genre.
After studying in here, when he learned a lot of money, he wants to go back to his country to live his family together. This is the most priorities of his dreams in his life.
posted by the blog at 6:29 PM
1 Comments:
Hye Jung,
You wrote a lot about Jose. That's great!
I have corrected your writing. This is the corrected version. Please look and see how it is different from the original:
This is about my partner whose name is Jose. He works four days a week. His house and job are in Queens. He has been working there for one year but he had many experiences working at his place. Before he moved to New York, he had lived in Mexico. He is single and does not have a girlfriend. I think that he really enjoys his free time before becoming a hushand and father. He wants to get a better job, which is why he is attending this class.
Jose has a big family, but he has lived alone since he came here. He has four younger sisters and one younger brother. He said that when he feels lonely or misses his family, he usually goes to the theater or goes to the gym to get rid of his feelings. Horror movies are his favorite genre.
After studying here, when he has earned a lot of money, he wants to go back to his country to live his family. This is the highest priority of his dreams in his life.
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