Maria del Carmen
Not only do all of us go to work every day, but all of us enjoyed visiting different places in New York. Moreover in 2014 we are all going to speak English very well. In addition this week we have been with too much cold this week and would like live in New York for ever.
Maria del Carmen, this is well written. The beginning and middle are perfect. There are some minor problems at the end- but it is apparent your English is much stronger now. That's great.
Here are correction suggestions.
A. There should be a comma (,) after "moreover"and "in addition"
correct: "Moreover, in 2014.." and "In addition, this week"
Correction of the last sentence: In addition, this week we have been too cold but would like to live in New York forever.
("But" makes more sense than "and" because it is surprising that people want to live forever in such a cold city).
Maria del Carmen, this is well written. The beginning and middle are perfect. There are some minor problems at the end- but it is apparent your English is much stronger now. That's great.
Here are correction suggestions.
A. There should be a comma (,) after "moreover"and "in addition"
correct: "Moreover, in 2014.." and "In addition, this week"
Correction of the last sentence: In addition, this week we have been too cold but would like to live in New York forever.
("But" makes more sense than "and" because it is surprising that people want to live forever in such a cold city).
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