Ulkar
The Group by "Only girls"
There are five people in our group. Five women. The maximum age is forty-nine, the minimum age is twenty-three and the average age is thirty-five. Students in our group have the following occupations: two babysitters, bartender, housekeeper, housewife. We are all students now.
We come from a total of four countries and represent three continents: South America, Asia and Europe-Asia. Three languages are spoken by our group: Spanish, Azerbaijani and Russian.
The largest hometown represented in our group is Medellin, Colombia, with a population of 1 million. The smallest hometown is Azogues, Ecuador, with a population of 5 thousand.
Our material status is varied. Two people are married, one person is single, one is divorced, one is separated.
Two of us live with roommate, three live with family.
The person in my group who has been in New York the longest is Martha, who come here twenty years ago. By contrast, I have been here one and half years. I have been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group. The average length of time in New York is about eight and half years.
It's always nice to meet new people.
Ulkar,
This is excellent. I see few errors.
1. I think "Five women" can't be an independent sentence because it has no verb. You might write instead: "There are five people in our group, five women." On the other hand, I think you want to emphasize that they are all women. Because that is an important aspect of your report, you might take what is called "poetic license" and use the not grammatically correct sentence for emphasis. If I were writing this, I would keep "Five women" an independent sentence. If I were taking the TOEFL test, I would change it.
"Our material status" should be "our marital status."
"Two of us live with roommates" is correct.
"Two of us live with a roomnate" is also correct.
"Two of us live with roommate" is incorrect.
The verb "come" in the sentence about Martha should be past tense.
The group benefited from your guidance.
There are five people in our group. Five women. The maximum age is forty-nine, the minimum age is twenty-three and the average age is thirty-five. Students in our group have the following occupations: two babysitters, bartender, housekeeper, housewife. We are all students now.
We come from a total of four countries and represent three continents: South America, Asia and Europe-Asia. Three languages are spoken by our group: Spanish, Azerbaijani and Russian.
The largest hometown represented in our group is Medellin, Colombia, with a population of 1 million. The smallest hometown is Azogues, Ecuador, with a population of 5 thousand.
Our material status is varied. Two people are married, one person is single, one is divorced, one is separated.
Two of us live with roommate, three live with family.
The person in my group who has been in New York the longest is Martha, who come here twenty years ago. By contrast, I have been here one and half years. I have been in New York the shortest of anyone in our group. The average length of time in New York is about eight and half years.
It's always nice to meet new people.
Ulkar,
This is excellent. I see few errors.
1. I think "Five women" can't be an independent sentence because it has no verb. You might write instead: "There are five people in our group, five women." On the other hand, I think you want to emphasize that they are all women. Because that is an important aspect of your report, you might take what is called "poetic license" and use the not grammatically correct sentence for emphasis. If I were writing this, I would keep "Five women" an independent sentence. If I were taking the TOEFL test, I would change it.
"Our material status" should be "our marital status."
"Two of us live with roommates" is correct.
"Two of us live with a roomnate" is also correct.
"Two of us live with roommate" is incorrect.
The verb "come" in the sentence about Martha should be past tense.
The group benefited from your guidance.
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