Diabetes in U.S. rising sharply .... by jenny sarria
The biggest reasons for the rise in diabetes is the increasing levels of obesity. American people are eating more fast food and getting less exercise, the disease is becoming a silent killer. The only way for America to control the escalating levels of diabetes is through educating people about the dangers of the disease.
posted by the blog at 4:29 AM
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Jenny,
You have written a clear, concise summary, that hits the main points. Your grammar is fine also. The correction I would like to make is the addition of the conjunction "so" between "exercise" (with comma) and "the disease."
The biggest reasons for the rise in diabetes is the increasing levels of obesity. American people are eating more fast food and getting less exercise,so the disease is becoming a silent killer. The only way for America to control the escalating levels of diabetes is through educating people about the dangers of the disease
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