Summary of Diabetes in U.S. rising sharply_Atchariya
American people have big problem. According to the U.S. Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDCP) report the level of diabetes has increased steeply. because one of the biggest reasons for increasing diabetes is obesity. Obesity causes by bad eating habit and life style. Now, the numbers of new cases would continue to rise sharply because Americans showed no signs changing their eating and exercise habits.
posted by the blog at 6:37 AM
2 Comments:
Atchariya,
Your summary is good. I would like to show you one problem with it.
You wrote, "because one of the biggest reasons for increasing diabetes is obesity."
The word "because" is wrong there. "The level of diabetes has increased steeply. One of the biggest reasons for increasing diabetes is obesity." That is correct. Do you see the difference?
Thank You :)
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