For Roberto
Let's look at your writing about Alfredo.
I have re-written it with some corrections. This time the changes are in capital letters so they are easier to see.
The grammar is fundamentally correct. You clearly understood the story and accurately summarized it. There are some errors of past tense verbs and word order.
English spelling is famously difficult. I recommend you use the "spell check" (ABC above on the right side). I use it and find it convenient.
from the teacher:
Alfredo Hinojosa was born in MEXICALI CITY, Mexico. Mexicali is 60 miles before THE U.S. border, CLOSE to California. His family HAD a gas station. ALFREDO'S FIRST JOB WAS IN HIS FATHER'S GAS STATION, when HE was 5 years old.
In 1970s, in Mexico THE economic situation BECAME CRITICAL, and Alfredo decided to go to the United StateS to help his family. He put 65 dollars in his pocket and WENT. The first job in the U.S., was in a farm. Alfredo picked cotton, cantaloupes and tomatoes. HE bought a terrible camper, WITH no doors, broken everywhere, and PAID $300.
One day Alfredo's cousin TOLD him to study English, and HE WENT to the community college to TAKE English classes. The teacher encourageD him to go to university. Alfredo WENT to Berkeley University in California and discoverED a passion for scientist studies. Alfredo continueD to study medicine, became a doctor, AND today is a neurosurgeon, professor at Johns Hopkins University, and developING his dream, to "help the people."
Original:
Alfredo Hinojosa was born in a Mexicali city, Mexico. Mexicali is 60 miles before U.S. border, closed to California. His family has a gas station. The first Alfredo jobs, as in gas stations father, when hi was 5 years old.
In 1970s, in Mexico became a critical economic situation, and Alfredo decided to go to the United State. to help his family. He put 65 dollars in his pocket and go. The first job in the U.S., was in a farm, Alfredo picked cotton, cantaloupes and tomatoes, hi bought a terrible camper, no doors, broken for everywhere, and payed $300.
One day Alfredo's cousin tell him to study english, and hi when to the community college to tacked English classes. The teacher encourage him to go to university. Alfredo go to Berkeley University in California and discover a passion for scientist studies. Alfredo continue to study a Medicine, became a Doctor, today is a neurosurgeon, professor at Johns Hopkins University, and develop to his dream, "help the peoples".
I have re-written it with some corrections. This time the changes are in capital letters so they are easier to see.
The grammar is fundamentally correct. You clearly understood the story and accurately summarized it. There are some errors of past tense verbs and word order.
English spelling is famously difficult. I recommend you use the "spell check" (ABC above on the right side). I use it and find it convenient.
from the teacher:
Alfredo Hinojosa was born in MEXICALI CITY, Mexico. Mexicali is 60 miles before THE U.S. border, CLOSE to California. His family HAD a gas station. ALFREDO'S FIRST JOB WAS IN HIS FATHER'S GAS STATION, when HE was 5 years old.
In 1970s, in Mexico THE economic situation BECAME CRITICAL, and Alfredo decided to go to the United StateS to help his family. He put 65 dollars in his pocket and WENT. The first job in the U.S., was in a farm. Alfredo picked cotton, cantaloupes and tomatoes. HE bought a terrible camper, WITH no doors, broken everywhere, and PAID $300.
One day Alfredo's cousin TOLD him to study English, and HE WENT to the community college to TAKE English classes. The teacher encourageD him to go to university. Alfredo WENT to Berkeley University in California and discoverED a passion for scientist studies. Alfredo continueD to study medicine, became a doctor, AND today is a neurosurgeon, professor at Johns Hopkins University, and developING his dream, to "help the people."
Original:
Alfredo Hinojosa was born in a Mexicali city, Mexico. Mexicali is 60 miles before U.S. border, closed to California. His family has a gas station. The first Alfredo jobs, as in gas stations father, when hi was 5 years old.
In 1970s, in Mexico became a critical economic situation, and Alfredo decided to go to the United State. to help his family. He put 65 dollars in his pocket and go. The first job in the U.S., was in a farm, Alfredo picked cotton, cantaloupes and tomatoes, hi bought a terrible camper, no doors, broken for everywhere, and payed $300.
One day Alfredo's cousin tell him to study english, and hi when to the community college to tacked English classes. The teacher encourage him to go to university. Alfredo go to Berkeley University in California and discover a passion for scientist studies. Alfredo continue to study a Medicine, became a Doctor, today is a neurosurgeon, professor at Johns Hopkins University, and develop to his dream, "help the peoples".
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