for Raul and Daniel

 Raul and Daniel,

The correction of your writing is below ("from the teacher"). You should read it and look at differences from the original.

 

 from the teacher:

Barack Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. His father was from Kenya and mother was white American. His parents divorced, and his mother married an Indonesia man.

He attended schools in Jakarta until he was ten years old. Then he returned to Hawaii. Obama majored in political science at Columbia University in New York.

Obama was the first black president of the Harvard Law Review. Obama was a teacher for twelve years at the University of Chicago. Then, he became an Illinois Senator in 1966.

Obama was elected as U.S. Senator in 2004. He supported legislation on conservation, immigration and honest leadership. When Obama assumed power, he battled serious economy problems. The President also confronted the global credit crisis and the crises in Iraq and Afghanistan.

 

Original

Barack Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. his father is from Kenya and mother is white American.
his parents divorced, and his mother married an Indonesia man.

He attend schools in Jakarta until he was ten years old. He returned to Hawaii. Obama was majored in political science, in Columbia University New York.

Obama was the first black president the Harvard law. Obama was teacher for twelve years at University Chicago. then, He became an Illinois Senator in 1966.

Obama was elected as Senator U.S. in 2004. He supported legislation on conservation, immigration and honest leadership.when Obama assume the power battling serious economy problems. the President to confront the global credit crisis and Iraq and Afghanistan.