for Lady Jimenez

This is the correction of your writing about Obama. When you have time, you should compare it to your original writing and notice the differences.

 

from the teacher:

Barack  Obama

Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. His parents got divorced, and his mother re-married and moved in Indonesia in 1967.
Obama is the 44th President of the United States of America. He made history in 2008, when he was elected as the first African American  President.
He moved to Chicago, where he worked as the director of a community project from 1985 to 1988. He studied at Harvard Law School and taught law at the University of Chicago for 12 years.

 

 

 

Original:

Barack  Obama

Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. His parents got divorced in his mother is married and moved in Indonesia in 1967.
Obama is the 44th President of the United States of America. He made history in 2008, he was elected as first African American  President.
He moved to Chicago, he worked as the Director of the Community from 1985 to 1988, he stared in Harvard Law School and taught law at the University of Chicago for 12 years..