for Danuta and Hendri
Danuta and Hendri,
The writing below is the correction of your writing about Obama. When you get a chance, you should compare it to your original writing and consider the differences.
Barack Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. His mother was American and his father was African.
His parents divorced, and his mother married an Indonesian man.
In 1967 they moved to Indonesia, where he went to school in Jakarta until age ten.
Obama studied political science and international relations at Columbia university in New York.
In 1985 Obama moved to Chicago and he worked as the director of a community project .
He was the first black president of the Harvard Law Review .
For twelve years he taught law at the University of Chicago.
He was elected senator of Illinois in 1996.
In 2004, Obama was elected as a U.S Senator.
IN 2008, Obama was elected president of the United States of America.
He is the first African American to be President of the U.S.A
Barack Obama is very intelligent and a good orator, and he is popular with many American people.
Obama won the Nobel Peace Prize in 2009.
He's honest.
Barack Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961, his mother is american and his is father is african.
His parents divorced , his mother married an Indonesian man.
In 1967 they moved to Indonesia , he went to the Jakarta school until 10 years.
Obama studied political science and international at Columbia university in New York.
In 1985 Obama moved to Chicago and he worked as the director of community project .
He was the first black president of the Harvard Law Review .
For twelve years he teach the law at the University of Chicago.
he was a senator of Illinois in 1996.
In 2004. Obama was elected as a U.S Senator.
IN 2008 Obama was elected president of United state of America.
He is the first African American to be President of U.S.A
Barack Obama is very intelligent and good orator, he is popular with many of American people.
Obama won the Nobel Peace Prize in 2009.
He's honest.
The writing below is the correction of your writing about Obama. When you get a chance, you should compare it to your original writing and consider the differences.
from the teacher:
Barack Obama's HistoryBarack Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. His mother was American and his father was African.
His parents divorced, and his mother married an Indonesian man.
In 1967 they moved to Indonesia, where he went to school in Jakarta until age ten.
Obama studied political science and international relations at Columbia university in New York.
In 1985 Obama moved to Chicago and he worked as the director of a community project .
He was the first black president of the Harvard Law Review .
For twelve years he taught law at the University of Chicago.
He was elected senator of Illinois in 1996.
In 2004, Obama was elected as a U.S Senator.
IN 2008, Obama was elected president of the United States of America.
He is the first African American to be President of the U.S.A
Barack Obama is very intelligent and a good orator, and he is popular with many American people.
Obama won the Nobel Peace Prize in 2009.
He's honest.
Original:
Barack Obama's HistoryBarack Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961, his mother is american and his is father is african.
His parents divorced , his mother married an Indonesian man.
In 1967 they moved to Indonesia , he went to the Jakarta school until 10 years.
Obama studied political science and international at Columbia university in New York.
In 1985 Obama moved to Chicago and he worked as the director of community project .
He was the first black president of the Harvard Law Review .
For twelve years he teach the law at the University of Chicago.
he was a senator of Illinois in 1996.
In 2004. Obama was elected as a U.S Senator.
IN 2008 Obama was elected president of United state of America.
He is the first African American to be President of U.S.A
Barack Obama is very intelligent and good orator, he is popular with many of American people.
Obama won the Nobel Peace Prize in 2009.
He's honest.
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