for Michael and Isabel

This is the correction of your writing about Obama. Please read it and notice the differences from the original:


from the teacher:


Obama was born in 1961 in Hawaii. His father was Kenyan and his mother was American.
He worked as the director of a community project from 1985-1988 and in 2008 was elected the first black President in The United States. In 2009 he won the Nobel Peace Prize.





original:

Obama was born in 1961 in Hawaii, His father is Kenyan and his mother is American.
He worked as the director of a community project from 1985-1988, in 2008 was elected the first black President in The United States. In 2009 won Nobel Peace Prize.