I Want to Be King( Present King’s History) - Hari Ram Ghimire- and under it correction by Kevin
I wanna be Kings( Present King’s History)
Despite the king's young brother being the richest person in the country, he wasn't happy. He wanted to become the king of the country. After planning many years later, he killed the king and the king's royal family. Not only did he kill the royal family, but he also killed many soldiers. After killing all the family, he became a king.
When he became king of the country, he handled all power. People weren't happy to see him become a king. He handled the army, police and all political parties. But one political party named "Maoist" didn't accept him. That political party was against and fought with his opinions. They said,” It is unkind."
A few years later, people and other political parties were supporting him. But Maoist thought “We should kick out the king."
That party raised the awareness of the people about the king. They requested to come to their seminars. People and political parties supported them. They started to fight with his soldiers and his supporters. A few years later, king felt alone in the war. No one did not support him. His was losing his power. No one liked him. Finally, he lost in the war. He gave resign letter and speech.
In that country, it began to be a peaceful and a quiet country. Now no body is not the king only president. He handled the country. People are being happy by the peaceful and quiet country.
CORRECTION
I Want To Be King ( Present King’s History)
Despite the king's young brother being the richest person in the country, he wasn't happy. He wanted to become the king of the country. After planning many years, he later killed the king and the king's royal family. Not only did he kill the royal family, but he also killed many soldiers. After killing all the family, he became a king.
When he became king of the country, he handled all power. People weren't happy to see him become a king. He handled the army, police and all political parties. But one political party named "Maoist" didn't accept him. That political party was against and fought with his opinions. They said,” It is unkind."
A few years later, people and other political parties were supporting him. But the Maoists thought “We should kick out the king."
That party raised the awareness of the people about the king. They requested them to come to their seminars. People and political parties supported them. They started to fight with his soldiers and his supporters. A few years later, the king felt alone in the war. No one did people not support him, but he was losing his power. No one liked him. Finally, he lost in the war. He gave a resignation letter and speech.
In that country, it began to be peaceful and quiet. Now nobody is king. There is only a president. He handles the country. People are happy in the peaceful and quiet country.
Despite the king's young brother being the richest person in the country, he wasn't happy. He wanted to become the king of the country. After planning many years later, he killed the king and the king's royal family. Not only did he kill the royal family, but he also killed many soldiers. After killing all the family, he became a king.
When he became king of the country, he handled all power. People weren't happy to see him become a king. He handled the army, police and all political parties. But one political party named "Maoist" didn't accept him. That political party was against and fought with his opinions. They said,” It is unkind."
A few years later, people and other political parties were supporting him. But Maoist thought “We should kick out the king."
That party raised the awareness of the people about the king. They requested to come to their seminars. People and political parties supported them. They started to fight with his soldiers and his supporters. A few years later, king felt alone in the war. No one did not support him. His was losing his power. No one liked him. Finally, he lost in the war. He gave resign letter and speech.
In that country, it began to be a peaceful and a quiet country. Now no body is not the king only president. He handled the country. People are being happy by the peaceful and quiet country.
CORRECTION
I Want To Be King ( Present King’s History)
Despite the king's young brother being the richest person in the country, he wasn't happy. He wanted to become the king of the country. After planning many years, he later killed the king and the king's royal family. Not only did he kill the royal family, but he also killed many soldiers. After killing all the family, he became a king.
When he became king of the country, he handled all power. People weren't happy to see him become a king. He handled the army, police and all political parties. But one political party named "Maoist" didn't accept him. That political party was against and fought with his opinions. They said,” It is unkind."
A few years later, people and other political parties were supporting him. But the Maoists thought “We should kick out the king."
That party raised the awareness of the people about the king. They requested them to come to their seminars. People and political parties supported them. They started to fight with his soldiers and his supporters. A few years later, the king felt alone in the war. No one did people not support him, but he was losing his power. No one liked him. Finally, he lost in the war. He gave a resignation letter and speech.
In that country, it began to be peaceful and quiet. Now nobody is king. There is only a president. He handles the country. People are happy in the peaceful and quiet country.
posted by the blog at 2:27 PM
2 Comments:
Check out my correction. Your writing was almost error-free, but there were some mistakes at the end. Good luck, and maybe we will meet again, at Laguardia or on K2. I recommend the book (in English) "Into Thin Air," by Jon Krakauer. You should read it. It's about Everest.
thank you Kavin Teacher
for correction
Hari R Ghimire
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