sigfrid
this was a story about the most noble knight, this knight was very loveables and he was very strong too. He lived in midgard (a little town in asgard). The name of this knight was sidfrig. Sidfrig was tall , he has long hair and his ejes was blue. But the story of sigfrid stared in asgard , in those days sigfrid wasnt a knight; he was an ordinary person , but he wanted to be the best knight of asgard . one day sigfrid was walking around asgard and he saw a pretty women and he said in his mind ¨ this women is very beautiful ¨ , that women was medium stature , her hair was long and her ejes was green . sigfrid asked her name and when the women said this name , some warrior attacked the women and sigfrid ran on front the women and showed up his sword ( this sword was a special present of his father , this sword are very strong and agile) and he fought versus 5 warrior and he killed the 5 warrior and that moment the women said ¨what is your name,noble knight¨sigfrid said ¨my name is sigfrid ,but im not a knight ¨ . At that moment my name is hilda the princess of asgard and now sigfrid you are my noble knight . from that day the people knew about the great sigfrid , but this story didnt ended this was only the beginning.
this story was continue
samuel ramos 3.2
this story was continue
samuel ramos 3.2
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2 Comments:
Samuel,
Great! I think other students will appreciate reading your excellent story. Thanks a lot for posting it.
The grammar is mostly correct. There are some problems with punctuation- basically, you should use more periods (.) Here's a correction:
This was a story about the most noble knight. This knight was very lovable and he was very strong too. He lived in Midgard (a little town in Asgard). The name of this knight was Sidfrig. Sidfrig was tall, had long hair and his eyes were blue. But the story of sigfrid started in Asgardl. In those days, Sigfrid wasnt a knight; he was an ordinary person, but he wanted to be the best knight of Asgard. One day Sigfrid was walking around Asgard and he saw a pretty woman and he said in his mind, ¨This woman is very beautiful. ¨ That woman was medium stature, her hair was long and her eyes were green. Sigfrid asked her name and when the woman said this name, some warrior attacked the women and Sigfrid ran in front of the women and showed his sword (this sword was a special present of his father, and it was very strong and agile), and he fought versus 5 warriors, and he killed the 5 warriors, and at that moment the woman said, ¨What is your name,noble knight?¨Sigfrid said, ¨My name is Sigfrid ,but I'm not a knight.
At that moment, the woman said, "My name is Hilda, the princess of Asgard and now Sigfrid you are my noble knight." From that day. the people knew about the great Sigfrid, but this story didn't end; this was only the beginning.
Reading my comment again, I see that I also made some punctuation mistakes. Writing isn't easy!
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