"Falling Tree Shatters Lives and Dreams of Family"

Jakra and group,

Thanks for your summary. Below are two copies. The first is original. The second has changes. 


Original:

           This story was a sad story which was talked about two people met at gym equipment. They were Mr. Dikov and  Ms. Li-Dikov.  After that, they fell down in love. Four years later, they was married. Mr. Dikov enlisted in the Army National Guard. At that time, Ms. Li-Dikov moved to San Antonio during her husband went to basic training. After that, they moved back to New York in order to start an online business selling clothing. After the couple, Ms. Li-Dikov was pregnant. They prepared cloths and names to new baby. Moreover, they also suggested the name in Chinese word for moonlight.

                On Sunday evening, Ms. Li-Dikov was strolling in Kissena Park and sitting on the bench. Finally, the woman was killed by giant tree toppled. After her family knew about this story, they came to inspect suddenly. Especially, her husband was very sad about this story.


With changes:

           This story was a sad story WHICH TALKED about two people WHO met at gym equipment. They were Mr. Dikov and  Ms. Li-Dikov.  After that, they FELL IN LOVE. Four years later, they WERE married. Mr. Dikov enlisted in the Army National Guard. At that time, Ms. Li-Dikov moved to San Antonio WHILE her husband went to basic training. After that, they moved back to New York in order to start an online business selling clothing. After THEY BECAME A couple, Ms. Li-Dikov was pregnant. They prepared clothEs and names FOR THE new baby. Moreover, they also suggested the name in THE Chinese word for moonlight.

                On Sunday evening, Ms. Li-Dikov was strolling in Kissena Park and sitting on A bench. Finally, the woman was killed by A giant tree THAT toppled. After her family knew about this story, they came to inspect suddenly. Especially, her husband was very sad about this story.