Angelica's story

                   My sister and I were in the story. The story happened in New York. My sister and I had a problem with the car. It happened when we came to the school. She felt concernerd.


Angelica,

Thanks for posting your story. The grammar is 100% correct. The spelling is 99% correct. "Concerned" is the correct spelling.

Another suggestion:  "The car" is correct, but "our car" sounds better.