ERIK and EDUARDO

ALFREDO HINOJOSA IS A MEXICAN NEUROSURGEON AND PROFESSOR AT JOHNS HOPKINS UNIVERSITY.

TWENTY YEARS AGO ALFREDO HINOJOSA,HOPPED A BORDER FENCE FROM MEXICO INTO THE UNITED STATES AND BECAME A MIGRANT FARMWORKER.

  IN MEXICO WHEN HE WAS 5 YEARS OLD HE WORKED AT HIS FATHER'S GAS STATION AND THEN WHEN HE WAS 18 YEARS OLD HE WAS A TEACHER AT HIS SCHOOL.

 IN THOSE DAYS THE MEXICO ECONOMY COLLAPSED AND HE MADE A DECISION GO TO THE UNITED STATES BUT HE TOOK THE DANGER WAY WALK THE U.S. BORDER.

WHEN HE FINALLY CAME TO THE U.S. HE FOUND A JOB AS A FARMER AND HIS JOB WAS PICKING COTTON,TOMATOES AND CANTALOUPES AND HE LIVED IN THE FIELDS IN A BROKEN-DOWN CAMPER HE BOUGHT FOR 300 DOLLARS.

 ONE DAY HIS COUSIN TOLD HIM YOU WILL BE A FARMER FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE AND WHEN HE HEARD THAT HE REALIZED IT WAS TIME TO MOVE ON.

 THE FIRST STEP THAT HE DID  HE SIGNED UP FOR ENGLISH CLASSES AT A COMMUNITY COLLEGE, WHERE A TEACHER ENCOURAGED HIM TO ATTEND THE UNIVERSITY OF CALIFORNIA.

 ALFREDO DEVELOPED A PASSION FOR THE SCIENTIFIC METHOD.HE WENT  ON TO HARVARD MEDICAL SCHOOL AND LATER HE RECEIVED HIS U.S. CITIZENSHIP.

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correction:

ALFREDO HINOJOSA IS A MEXICAN NEUROSURGEON AND PROFESSOR AT JOHNS HOPKINS UNIVERSITY.

TWENTY YEARS AGO ALFREDO HINOJOSA HOPPED A BORDER FENCE FROM MEXICO INTO THE UNITED STATES AND BECAME A MIGRANT FARMWORKER.

  IN MEXICO WHEN HE WAS 5 YEARS OLD HE WORKED AT HIS FATHER'S GAS STATION AND THEN, WHEN HE WAS 18 YEARS OLD, HE WAS A TEACHER AT HIS SCHOOL.

 IN THOSE DAYS THE MEXICAN ECONOMY COLLAPSED AND HE MADE A DECISION TO GO TO THE UNITED STATES, BUT HE TOOK THE DANGEROUS WAY, WALKING ACROSS THE U.S. BORDER.

WHEN HE FINALLY CAME TO THE U.S. HE FOUND A JOB AS A FARMER. HIS JOB WAS PICKING COTTON, TOMATOES AND CANTALOUPES AND HE LIVED IN THE FIELDS IN A BROKEN-DOWN CAMPER HE BOUGHT FOR 300 DOLLARS.

 ONE DAY HIS COUSIN TOLD HIM,  "YOU WILL BE A FARMER FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE," AND WHEN HE HEARD THAT HE REALIZED IT WAS TIME TO MOVE ON.

 THE FIRST STEP THAT HE DID  WAS SIGNING UP FOR ENGLISH CLASSES AT A COMMUNITY COLLEGE, WHERE A TEACHER ENCOURAGED HIM TO ATTEND THE UNIVERSITY OF CALIFORNIA.

 ALFREDO DEVELOPED A PASSION FOR THE SCIENTIFIC METHOD. HE WENT  ON TO HARVARD MEDICAL SCHOOL AND LATER HE RECEIVED HIS U.S. CITIZENSHIP.

Sentences are good. It's probably better not to use all capital letters.