feedback for Daniela and Rosangel
Daniela and Rosangel,
Your two paragraphs accurately summarize the article about the pinch hitter. It might be better to add one sentence that gives the idea of her pinch hitting. That's the title of the article ("Pinch Hitter"), so it's an important idea. You might write, for example, "Yuja performed for other pianists when they were unavailable."
This history is about a girl. She started play to piano when she has six years old. She was the usual child-virtuoso. When she has seven years old she did her first concert. She was nominated for a Grammy for her first CD was Sonatas ans Etudes.
She likes concerts because she can take the music in aurally ans visually. In de future you can see in the Grammy and in New York Bureau. Additionally, you can see her videos in youtube.
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Your summary had very few errors, corrected here:
This history is about a girl. She started play to piano when she has six years old. She was the usual child-virtuoso. When she has seven years old she did her first concert. She was nominated for a Grammy for her first CD, which was Sonatas and Etudes.
She likes concerts because she can take the music in aurally and visually. In the future, you may be able to see her win a Grammy award and in the New York Bureau. Additionally, you can see her videos on youtube.
(I'm not sure what you mean by the New York Bureau. Can you explain what that is?)
Your two paragraphs accurately summarize the article about the pinch hitter. It might be better to add one sentence that gives the idea of her pinch hitting. That's the title of the article ("Pinch Hitter"), so it's an important idea. You might write, for example, "Yuja performed for other pianists when they were unavailable."
This history is about a girl. She started play to piano when she has six years old. She was the usual child-virtuoso. When she has seven years old she did her first concert. She was nominated for a Grammy for her first CD was Sonatas ans Etudes.
She likes concerts because she can take the music in aurally ans visually. In de future you can see in the Grammy and in New York Bureau. Additionally, you can see her videos in youtube.
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Your summary had very few errors, corrected here:
This history is about a girl. She started play to piano when she has six years old. She was the usual child-virtuoso. When she has seven years old she did her first concert. She was nominated for a Grammy for her first CD, which was Sonatas and Etudes.
She likes concerts because she can take the music in aurally and visually. In the future, you may be able to see her win a Grammy award and in the New York Bureau. Additionally, you can see her videos on youtube.
(I'm not sure what you mean by the New York Bureau. Can you explain what that is?)
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