Angelica and Lorenzo,
You selected the important points from the article. I especially like that you included the comment from his cousin that motivated Alfredo. That seemed to me as well a turning point in his life.
The first sentence needs an article. It should be "a former illegal immigrant."
You need a period (.) after "immigrant" because it is the end of the sentence. "Cross" should be past tense (crossed).
After "camper," you need a period (.) Be careful not to end sentences with commas (,). If that is your habit, you should break it.
"Take a decision" has the wrong very and the wrong tense. It should be "made a decision."
"Decision" is misspelled.
"Start" has to be past tense (started).
"In this time" should be "At this time" (English prepositions are difficult).
"US" is incorrect. "U.S." is correct.
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