Thursday, February 21, 2013

Ferda,

Your summary of Barack Obama's life is well done. It is a pleasure to read. The subject and your writing are excellent.

I found two errors:


incorrect: After, Obama moved to Chicago.
correct: After that, Obama moved to Chicago.

incorrect: There, he worked the director community project

correct: There, he worked as the director of a community project. 

  Barack Obama is the 44th president of The United States of America. Obama was born in Hawaii in 1961. His father was a black Kenyan and mother was an American. His parents divorced and his mother married an Indonesian man.

         Obama majored in political science and international relations at Columbia University in New York. After , Obama moved to Chicago. There, he worked the director community project from 1985 to 1988.

         He became the first black president of the Harvard Law Review. In 2004, Obama was elected U.S senator. He won the Nobel Peace Prize.

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