telc students and teacher
Name: Miran Kim
Class: Sat. Non- intensive class
date: Jan. 21, 2004
Argument Title: The Government of Bush has attacked in Iraq
The Government of Bush has attacked Iraq though the UN could not find mass Destruction in Iraq. Furthermore the most of the world opposed to the government of bush to attack Iraq. I am opposed to US attack Iraq. The US troops should be withdrew from Iraq. There are many reasons what I oppose the government of Bush to invade Iraq.
The all of war which attack the others country could not be admitted and there are no any reason for war. The war will bring an orphan and widow and a number of life will be killed by war. We will lost our property and our environment will be completly destroyed.
It is also the government of Bush invades Iraq to obtain the oil and the power which the government of Bush is an able to control cuntries in mid east. The information that there were Mass Destruction in Iraq was not true. Also the Iraq was not linked with Al Qaeda.
The Finally, the each of nation must be make to decision by own people of own national. It is important those issues are not only to make the act of legal, but also to quit dictator issue.
In conclusion, there are many reasons in opposed the government of Bush attacked Iraq. The government of Bush should be evacuate the troops from Iraq because the all of life will be respected and preserved property and environment of world. The nation should be allowed to make their own decision. Furthermore I am not agree to invade other country for own porfit.
Class: Sat. Non- intensive class
date: Jan. 21, 2004
Argument Title: The Government of Bush has attacked in Iraq
The Government of Bush has attacked Iraq though the UN could not find mass Destruction in Iraq. Furthermore the most of the world opposed to the government of bush to attack Iraq. I am opposed to US attack Iraq. The US troops should be withdrew from Iraq. There are many reasons what I oppose the government of Bush to invade Iraq.
The all of war which attack the others country could not be admitted and there are no any reason for war. The war will bring an orphan and widow and a number of life will be killed by war. We will lost our property and our environment will be completly destroyed.
It is also the government of Bush invades Iraq to obtain the oil and the power which the government of Bush is an able to control cuntries in mid east. The information that there were Mass Destruction in Iraq was not true. Also the Iraq was not linked with Al Qaeda.
The Finally, the each of nation must be make to decision by own people of own national. It is important those issues are not only to make the act of legal, but also to quit dictator issue.
In conclusion, there are many reasons in opposed the government of Bush attacked Iraq. The government of Bush should be evacuate the troops from Iraq because the all of life will be respected and preserved property and environment of world. The nation should be allowed to make their own decision. Furthermore I am not agree to invade other country for own porfit.
posted by the blog at 3:45 PM
3 Comments:
Miran,
Here is the correction of your writing. Please compare it with your original writing. I have used capital letters for corrections.
By the way, you expressed your opinion clearly and forcefully. Good work!
The Government of Bush has attacked Iraq though the UN could not find WEAPONS OF mass Destruction in Iraq. Furthermore, MOST of the world WAS opposed to the government of Bush ATTACKING Iraq. I am opposed to the US attackING Iraq. The US troops should be withDRAWN from Iraq. There are many reasons WHY I oppose the government of Bush INVADING Iraq.
ALL WARS which attack OTHER COUNTRIES could not be admitted and there IS no any reason for war. The war will bring ORPHANS AND WIDOWS and a number of LIVES will be killed by war. We will LOSE our property and our environment will be completly destroyed.
It is also THE CASE THAT the government of Bush HAS INVADED Iraq to obtain the oil and the power which the government of Bush WILL GAIN IN COUNTRIES IN THE mid east. The information that there were Mass Destruction in Iraq was not true. Also IRAQ was not linked with Al Qaeda.
FINALLY, EACH NATION MUST MAKES DECISIONS by ITS own people IN THEIR own NATION. It is important THAT those issues are not only to make the ACT legal, but also to quit THE DICTATOR issue.
In conclusion, there are many reasons in OPPOSITION TO the government of Bush ATTACKING Iraq. The government of Bush should EVACUATE the troops from Iraq because ALL life will be respected and THE property and environment of THE WORLD WILL BE PRESERVED. NATIONS should be allowed to make their own decision. Furthermore , I DO not agree WITH INVADING ANOTHER country for ONE'S own PROFIT
Miran,
Another piece of advice: Instead of "the government of Bush," you could say "the Bush administration."
By the way, what are your future plans for your education? Do you know what you want to do in the future? If you don't feel like answering, it's okay.
What is the most recent book you have read?
what are your future plans for your education? Do you know what you want to do in the future? What is the most recent book you have read?
I spent a lot of time on question what I want to do in the future. In advance, I was with disable student as like autism and disdeveloped studnet.
Maybe I will study special education in cuny college. But It will take a several years for me. That time is bother me. Even though I know time is not important, I can't discount time. I think there is major resaon it is my english level. By theway I involve with korean actist for korean unification in usa.
Kim jung il who is north korea president and kim dae jong who is south korea president last term met five years ago. The korean with south and north decide this year is first year for unification work. we are going to organize some group for this year's job. That is interesting ........
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