Bikram and Ignacio

Mr. Alfredo Hinojosa is mexian

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Mr. Alfredo Hinojosa is Mexican.

ERIK and EDUARDO

ALFREDO HINOJOSA IS A MEXICAN NEUROSURGEON AND PROFESSOR AT JOHNS HOPKINS UNIVERSITY.

TWENTY YEARS AGO ALFREDO HINOJOSA,HOPPED A BORDER FENCE FROM MEXICO INTO THE UNITED STATES AND BECAME A MIGRANT FARMWORKER.

  IN MEXICO WHEN HE WAS 5 YEARS OLD HE WORKED AT HIS FATHER'S GAS STATION AND THEN WHEN HE WAS 18 YEARS OLD HE WAS A TEACHER AT HIS SCHOOL.

 IN THOSE DAYS THE MEXICO ECONOMY COLLAPSED AND HE MADE A DECISION GO TO THE UNITED STATES BUT HE TOOK THE DANGER WAY WALK THE U.S. BORDER.

WHEN HE FINALLY CAME TO THE U.S. HE FOUND A JOB AS A FARMER AND HIS JOB WAS PICKING COTTON,TOMATOES AND CANTALOUPES AND HE LIVED IN THE FIELDS IN A BROKEN-DOWN CAMPER HE BOUGHT FOR 300 DOLLARS.

 ONE DAY HIS COUSIN TOLD HIM YOU WILL BE A FARMER FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE AND WHEN HE HEARD THAT HE REALIZED IT WAS TIME TO MOVE ON.

 THE FIRST STEP THAT HE DID  HE SIGNED UP FOR ENGLISH CLASSES AT A COMMUNITY COLLEGE, WHERE A TEACHER ENCOURAGED HIM TO ATTEND THE UNIVERSITY OF CALIFORNIA.

 ALFREDO DEVELOPED A PASSION FOR THE SCIENTIFIC METHOD.HE WENT  ON TO HARVARD MEDICAL SCHOOL AND LATER HE RECEIVED HIS U.S. CITIZENSHIP.

NOW 


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ALFREDO HINOJOSA IS A MEXICAN NEUROSURGEON AND PROFESSOR AT JOHNS HOPKINS UNIVERSITY.

TWENTY YEARS AGO ALFREDO HINOJOSA HOPPED A BORDER FENCE FROM MEXICO INTO THE UNITED STATES AND BECAME A MIGRANT FARMWORKER.

  IN MEXICO WHEN HE WAS 5 YEARS OLD HE WORKED AT HIS FATHER'S GAS STATION AND THEN, WHEN HE WAS 18 YEARS OLD, HE WAS A TEACHER AT HIS SCHOOL.

 IN THOSE DAYS THE MEXICAN ECONOMY COLLAPSED AND HE MADE A DECISION TO GO TO THE UNITED STATES, BUT HE TOOK THE DANGEROUS WAY, WALKING ACROSS THE U.S. BORDER.

WHEN HE FINALLY CAME TO THE U.S. HE FOUND A JOB AS A FARMER. HIS JOB WAS PICKING COTTON, TOMATOES AND CANTALOUPES AND HE LIVED IN THE FIELDS IN A BROKEN-DOWN CAMPER HE BOUGHT FOR 300 DOLLARS.

 ONE DAY HIS COUSIN TOLD HIM,  "YOU WILL BE A FARMER FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE," AND WHEN HE HEARD THAT HE REALIZED IT WAS TIME TO MOVE ON.

 THE FIRST STEP THAT HE DID  WAS SIGNING UP FOR ENGLISH CLASSES AT A COMMUNITY COLLEGE, WHERE A TEACHER ENCOURAGED HIM TO ATTEND THE UNIVERSITY OF CALIFORNIA.

 ALFREDO DEVELOPED A PASSION FOR THE SCIENTIFIC METHOD. HE WENT  ON TO HARVARD MEDICAL SCHOOL AND LATER HE RECEIVED HIS U.S. CITIZENSHIP.

Sentences are good. It's probably better not to use all capital letters. 

Stacy and Andy

Hi we talk about Alfredo Hinojosa. He was a migrant farmrworker and become to neurosurgeon.
Alfredo Hinojosa cross the border line From Mexico to USA 20 years ago. He was born in a tiny farmer community 60 miles south of the U.S. border.
When he was 5 years old he worked in his father gas station and his grandmother was a village healer and midwife. When he was 18 years old in the mid 1970s, his father salary is not enough  for take care the family because at that time in Mexico's economy collapsed. Alfredo Hinojosa continued his schooling and became a teacher by the time but it was unable to provide his family that is the reason why Alfredo decide came to U.S. like his cousin.
He would be a farmworker and live in a very old camper that he bought for $300.


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Hi. we talked about Alfredo Hinojosa. He was a migrant farmrworker and became a neurosurgeon.

Alfredo Hinojosa crossed the border line from Mexico to to the U.S. 20 years ago. He was born in a tiny farm community 60 miles south of the U.S. border.

When he was 5 years old, he worked in his father's gas station, and his grandmother was a village healer and midwife. When he was 18 years old in the mid 1970s, his father salary was not enough to take care of the family because at that time Mexico's economy collapsed. Alfredo Hinojosa continued his schooling and became a teacher at that time but was unable to provide for his family. That is the reason Alfredo decided to come to the U.S. like his cousin.

He would be a farmworker and live in a very old camper that he bought for $300.

Amauris Guaba

Alfredo Hinijosa was born in Mexico. In 1970s, Mexico's economy collapse, he had take gran decision runned for north, there had relatives parents.

 Mr. Alfredo Hinojosa arrived to United State from Mexico became a migrant farmworker. Alfredo picked cotton,tomates and cantaloupes, and lived in th His father worked in gas station, his grandmother was a village healer and a midwife


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Alfredo Hinijosa was born in Mexico. In the 1970s, Mexico's economy collapsed, and he made a big decision to run to the north, where he had relatives, parents.

 Mr. Alfredo Hinojosa arrived in the United States from Mexico and became a migrant farmworker. Alfredo picked cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes, and lived in a trailer. His father worked in a gas station. His grandmother was a village healer and a midwife.

DIANA VILLACRES AND AMANDINE GAUDEFROY

Alfredo is a thirty eight years old neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkinks University. He works for find a treatment of brain cancer.

He arrived in the United States twenty years ago, and his first job was a migrant farmworker. But when he had five years old, he worked with his father, in his gas station.


Alfredo grew up in a small town closed to Mexico. His family was very poor and really affected with the Mexico's economy collapsed.
At eighteen, he was for his first time a teacher and he continued to work as a farmworker, for had money and helped his family.

Alfredo started a English class at a commumity college, where one of his teacher encouraged him to attend the University of California, Berkeley. 


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Alfredo is a thirty eight year old neurosurgeon and professor at Johns Hopkinks University. He works to find a treatment of brain cancer.

He arrived in the United States twenty years ago, and his first job was a migrant farmworker. But when he was five years old, he worked with his father, in his gas station.

Alfredo grew up in a small town closed to Mexico. His family was very poor and really affected when Mexico's economy collapsed (or: affected by the collapse of Mexico's economy). 

At eighteen, he was for his first time a teacher and he continued to work as a farm worker, to have money and help his family.

Alfredo started an English class at a commumity college, where one of his teacher encouraged him to attend the University of California, Berkeley. 

SONIA ZOILA

ALFREDO HINOJOSA

Alfredo Hinojosa  was born in Mexico at the border of the USA. He was working at his father"s gas station
when hi was five years old, his grand mother was healer and midwife


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Alfredo Hinojosa

Alfredo Hinojosa  was born in Mexico at the border of the USA. He was working at his father"s gas station  

when he was five years old. His grand mother was a healer and midwife.

Phannipha and Gerry

Alfredro Hinojosa was born in Mexico and then he hopped a border fence to U.S. 20 years ago. He worked about farmworker. when he stayed at Mexico he had work with his father's gas station when he was 5 years old and his grandmother's had  2 jobs are a village healer and midwife. Today he have three jobs are neurosurgeon, professor and research also he working to find a new treatment for brain cancer.
His father could no longer keep food on the table for the family within Mexico's economy collapsed in 1970 also he was unable to provide for his family. He became a teacher when he was 18 years old.
He picked on farm in U.S. three crops are cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes. when his cousin said that his would be a farm worker for the rest of his life, he realized it was time to move on. Her started in the community school then attend Berkeley, University of California and finally he went on to Harvard Medical School. He says is successful because many people extended a hand to him throughout his life.


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Alfredro Hinojosa was born in Mexico, and then he hopped a border fence to the U.S. 20 years ago. He worked as a farm worker. When he stayed at Mexico he had worked with his father's gas station when he was 5 years old, and his grandmother had  2 jobs, which were village healer and midwife. Today he has three jobs, which are neurosurgeon, professor and research. Also, he is working to find a new treatment for brain cancer.

His father could no longer keep food on the table for the family when Mexico's economy collapsed in the 1970s. Also, he was unable to provide for his family. He became a teacher when he was 18 years old.

On a farm in the U.S. he picked three crops, which were cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes. When his cousin said that he would be a farm worker for the rest of his life, he realized it was time to move on. Her started in the community school, then attended Berkeley, University of California, and finally he went on to Harvard Medical School. He says he is successful because many people extended a hand to him throughout his life.

Ignacio and Bikram

Alfredo's story

Mr.Alfredo is a mexican guy who hopped a border fence from mexico to u.s.a .He became a migrant as many as more. He came to this country 20 years ago and he started to work in a farm. He decide to came to this country because the economy in mexico  was really bad.His first job in his life was at his father gas station.At the farm hi picked cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes. In his country he was a teacher.He used to live in a broken down camper when he arrived in U.S.A he bought it for a $300.He signed up for English cause he wanted to progress then a teacher encouraged to him to go to the  university of california Berkeley then alfredo developed a passion


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Alfredo's story

Mr.Alfredo Hinojosa is a Mexican guy who hopped a border fence from Mexico to the U.S.A. He became a migrant as many more have. He came to this country 20 years ago and he started to work on a farm. He decided to come to this country because the economy in Mexico  was really bad. 

His first job in his life was at his father gas station. On the farm he picked cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes. In his country he was a teacher. He used to live in a broken down camper when he arrived in the U.S.A he bought it for $300.He signed up for English classes because he wanted to progress. Then a teacher encouraged to him to go to the  university of California, Berkeley, where Alfredo developed a passion for the scientific method. 

Tina and Donaldo

  Mr. Alfredo was born in Mexico, in 1995 Alfredo crossed the Mexico fence border into United States and became a migrant farmworker.

 Mr. Hinojosa's life was so hard because the economy of his country was collapsed, at the age of five started working as gas attendent at his father's gas station. His grandmother was a village healer and a midwife.


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 Mr. HInojosa was born in Mexico, in 1995. Alfredo crossed the Mexico fence border into the United States and became a migrant farmworker.

 Mr. Hinojosa's life was so hard because the economy of his country was collapsed, and as a result at the age of five he started working as a gas attendent at his father's gas station. His grandmother was a village healer and a midwife.

Juana and Yanelly

 Alfredo Hinojosa, it was a little boy Mexican that crossing the border with their parents.He was a child worker since he was five years old he started work at his father's gas station then when he and his family already lived in U.S.

 When in Mexico's economy collapsed his father was not enought for support his family, at that time Alfredo was 18, and became a teacher, he made the decision to move north he worked in farm, and picked cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes he bought a broken-down camper for $300 dollars to live
in the field.

     He studied in University of California with a scholarship for good attend. and them went on to Harvard Medical School.

    Nowadays he is a successful person he is a neurosurgeon, professor and researcher for breakthrough in the treatment of brain cancer, and work in Johns Hopkins University

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 Alfredo Hinojosa was a little Mexican boy who crossed the border with his parents.He was a child worker since he was five years old, when he started work at his father's gas station in Mexico. His family was still in Mexico then.

When  Mexico's economy collapsed his father did not earn enough to support his family. At that time Alfredo was 18 and became a teacher. He made the decision to move north. He worked on a farm and picked cotton, tomatoes and cantaloupes. He bought a broken-down camper for $300 dollars to live in a field.

He studied at the University of California with a scholarship for good grades and then went on to Harvard Medical School.

Nowadays he is a successful person. He is a neurosurgeon, professor and researcher looking for a breakthrough in the treatment of brain cancer and works in Johns Hopkins University

about Alfredo

Work with your partner.

Write about Alfredo. Use one computer. Write together. Talk while writing.

First, click on SIGN IN (top right)

Second, write the USER NAME (same as email but with @yahoo.com)

Next, write the PASSWORD (it's different from the email). If you don't know it, ask Kevin

Then, click on the ORANGE PENCIL ICON

Write your name and your partner's name at the top.

Amandine

I would like to introduce my partner, Amandine. She from France, she arrived New York on January 2015. she came to learn English and further her education to enable her get a good job, presently she worked as a baby sitter in order to pay her bills and other expenses


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce my partner, Amandine. She is from France. She arrived in New York on January 2015. She came to learn English and further her education to enable her to get a good job. Presently, she works as a baby sitter in order to pay her bills and other expenses.

Juana and Martha

I would like to introduce you to my partner Juana Baez.  Juana is from Santiago, Dominican Republic, where she worked as an finances for Orange Company.  Juana has lived in New York for three years.  She came here because she wants to a new life and progress.  she needs a better job and better life.

Juana's hobby is shopping and movies, she loves go to the Malls and go  .



CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner Juana Baez.  Juana is from Santiago, the Dominican Republic, where she worked in fiance for Orange Company.  Juana has lived in New York for three years.  She came here because she wants a new life and to progress.  She needs a better job and better life.

Juana's hobby is shopping and movies. she loves go to malls.

Zoila and Yanely

i would like to introduce you to my partner  Yannely, yanely is from Dominica republic,
she live in in NY,for here for one year.she works as a home health aide
she live in Brooklyn . she is


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner,  Yanely. Yanely is from the Dominican Republic.

She lives in in N.Y. and has been here for one year. She works as a home health aide and

lives in Brooklyn.

Karina and Miledys

I would like to introduce you to my classmate, Karina.

Karina is from Ecuador, She was studied high School in your country. Karina has lived in New York for two years, She Don't work now. She wants to speak English more fluently because she wants to obtain a good Job as a medical assistant.

Karina's hobby is to cook. She likes cakes and desserts.


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my classmate, Karina.

Karina is from Ecuador. She was studying (or: she studied- if she finished) in high school in her country. Karina has lived in New York for two years, She doesn't work now. She wants to speak English more fluently because she wants to obtain a good job as a medical assistant.

Karina's hobby is to cook. She likes cakes and desserts.

gerry and anita

I would like to introduce you to my partner Gerardo, he is from Mexico city, he lives in New York for about 9 years, he lives in Corona Queens.  He came here because he wants to work in construction, but he couldn't get a job on it, that's why now he is working as a chef, that's why he is studding English to move further for a better job.

Gerardo hobby is play tennis.  He likes to do it in the park.


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner, Gerardo. He is from Mexico City. He has lived in New York for about 9 years. He lives in Corona, Queens.  He came here because he wants to work in construction, but he couldn't get a job it it. That's why now he is working as a chef, and it is why he is studying English to move further for a better job.

Gerardo hobby is playing tennis.  He likes to do it in the park.

Yannenlly and Zoila

I would like to introduce you to my partner Zoila. 

Zoila is from Ecuador.

Zoila has lived in New York for eight years.

She lives in Queens.

She has two children.

She studing English in LaGuardia Community College.

She works housekeeper. 

She likes to dance.


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner Zoila. Zoila is from Ecuador. Zoila has lived in New York for eight years. She lives in Queens. She has two children. She is studying English at LaGuardia Community College. She works as a housekeeper.  She likes to dance.

Yunyong and Andy

My classmate name 's Yunyong, he is 28 years old and from Thailand, He was work at the retired center and he came to USA for study English, Yunyong live in Queens tree years. He like to play soccer, he have a teen and they are good. 


CORRECTION:

My classmate name 's Yunyong. He is 28 years old and from Thailand.  He was working at a retirement center, and he came to U.S.A. to study English. Yunyong has lived in Queens for three years. He like to play soccer. He has a team, and they are good. 

Stacy

I would like to introduce you to my partner, Stacy is from Bangkok, Thailand, where she worked as sale and marketing and now she work as an Aupair in Whiteplain. Stacy has lived in New York for 2 months. She came here because she want to improve English skill and learn new culture. She need to speak English perfectly for her job and her life.

Stacy hobby is reading, caving. She likes to cook and good for cooked.


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner, Stacy. She is from Bangkok, Thailand, where she worked in sales and marketing (or as a salesperson and marketer), and now she work as an a au pair in White Plains. Stacy has lived in New York for 2 months. She came here because she wants to improve her English skill and learn a new culture. She needs to speak English perfectly for her job and her life.

Stacy hobbies are  reading and carving. She likes to cook and is good at cooking.

Phannipha

I would like to introduce you for my partner, Phannipha. Phannipha is from Nan,Thailand., where she worked as a Human Recource Office and now she working as an  Au pair with Host family in Huntington. Phannipha has lived in New York for 2 months. She came here because she want learn something new culture and work with a baby. She very love baby. The most, she wnat to improve her English's skill. She needs to speck English perfectly for

CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you for my partner, Phannipha. Phannipha is from Nan,Thailand, where she worked in a human resources office (or: as a human resources officer), and now she is working as an  au pair with  a host family in Huntington. Phannipha has lived in New York for 2 months. She came here because she wants to learn a new culture and work with a baby. She loves babies very much. Most of all, she wants to improve her English skill. She needs to speak English perfectly. 

Bikram

Iwould like to introduce you to my partner bikram . Bikran is from Kathmandu Nepal.
Where He worked as an cashier in supermarket . Bikran has lived New York  for three month .
He came here. becouse He wants to work in Supermarket . He needs to speak English perfectly for his jobs.
Bikran's hobbys playing soccer .He like 


CORRECTION:

Iwould like to introduce you to my partner Bikram . Bikran is from Kathmandu, Nepal,

where he worked as a cashier in a supermarket . Bikran has lived New York  for three months.

He came here because he wants to work in a supermarket . He needs to speak English perfectly for his jobs.

Bikran's hobbys playing soccer.

I would like introduce you to my partner Ignacio. Ignacio is from Mexico he works in restaurant like cook.  He has lived in New York for four years.He came here because he like this country.
Ignacio hobby is french cook but now in his job he cook Italian , he loves to ride bicycle and run.

CORRECTION:

I would like introduce you to my partner Ignacio. Ignacio is from Mexico. He works in a restaurant as a cook.  He has lived in New York for four years.He came here because he likes this country.

Ignacio's hobby is French cooking, but now at his job he cooks Italian. He loves to ride his bicycle and run.

Patrycja

I would like to introduce you to my classmate patrycja
patrycja is from poland. in her contry she worked like barber.
she has lived in new york for a year and a half. she works assistant provide.
she came to here because she wants to get a good job and also likes the city
patrycja's hobby in swimming and take a walk. . 


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my classmate Patrycja. Patrycja is from Poland. In her contry she worked as a barber. She has lived in New York for a year and a half. She works as an assistant provider (or: assistance provider). She came to here because she wants to get a good job and also likes the city.

Patrycja's hobby in swimming and taking a walk.  

Miledys and Karina

I would like to introduce you to my classmate Miledys. She is from Dominican Republic, Miledys has  lived in new york for one year. She work in child Care. She needs to speak good English for study her career the architect. She is married.


Miledys hobby is travel for the city. She likes bachata music.

CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my classmate Miledys. She is from the Dominican Republic. Miledys has  lived in New York for one year. She works in child care. She needs to speak good English to study for her career as an architect. She is married.

Miledys, hobby is traveling in the city (or to different cities). She likes bachata music.

Amandine and Tina.

I would like to introduce you to my partner Tina.
Tina is from Nigeria, where she worked as an registered nurse. Tina lives in New York, since 10 years. She came here because she wants to valid her

CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner Tina. Tina is from Nigeria, where she worked as a registered nurse. Tina has lived in New York since 10 years ago. She came here because she wants to validate her nursing license. 

Sonia P.

I would like to introduce to my partner.

Andy and Yunyong

My partner 's name is Andy . He is come from Ecuador. He is 30 years old. He was married ,he has one daughter.He has been New york 5 years. He come to New york because he has family  and

CORRECTION:

My partner 's name is Andy . He comes from Ecuador. He is 30 years old. He is married and has one daughter. He has been in New York 5 years. He came to New york because he has family.

Martha

   




     I would like to introduce you to my partner Martha Espinal, Martha is from Santiago, Dominican
Republic, where she worked as manager of costumer service in bank of Ademi for five years. Martha has lived in New York for five years. She came here because she got married and her husband lived in this country, she needs to speak English perfectly for her son and husband, and for a better job.


     Martha's hobby is reading her favorite author is Paulo Cohelo from Rio de Janeiro Brazil.

CORRECTION:

   I would like to introduce you to my partner Martha Espinal. Martha is from Santiago, Dominican

Republic, where she worked as manager of costumer service in the Bank of Ademi for five years. Martha has lived in New York for five years. She came here because she got married and her husband lived in this country. She needs to speak English perfectly for her son and husband, and for a better job.

     Martha's hobby is reading. Her favorite author is Paulo Cohelo from Rio de Janeiro, Brazil.

I would like to introduce you my partner Diana. Diana is coming from Qatar where she worked  as an cashier in Super market. Diana has lived in New york for six month.She came here becouse  She want to work perfectly .She needs to speak English for perfectly her for job.


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you my partner Diana. Diana has come from Qatar where she worked  as a cashier in a supermarket. Diana has lived in New york for six months.She came here because she wants to work perfectly. She needs to speak English perfectly her for job.

Anita and Gerry

I would like to introduce you to my partner Anita. Anita is from Cuenca Ecuador, she has lived in NY for about 14 years, she lives in east Elmhurst now, She came here because she wants to work in the nails store, and she study in The La Guardia School because she want to get better her English for help her daughter in the homeworks, she have 3 kids they are all  girls. Anita's Hobby is playing basketball, she some times practice in the park close her house.

CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner Anita. Anita is from Cuenca, Ecuador. She has lived in NY for about 14 years. She lives in East Elmhurst now. She came here because she wants to work in a nails store, and she studies at  La Guardia Community College because she wants to improve her English to help her daughter with homework. She has 3 kids, who are all  girls. Anita's Hobby is playing basketball. She some times practices in the park close to her house.

My name SMON pakamas My partner name Sonia

I would like to introduce you to my partner, Sonia.

Viviana and Simone

I would like to introduce you to my partner, Viviana. Viviana is from Medellin, Colombia, where she worked as an waiters in a restaurant.
Viviana has lived in NY for 4 years. She came here because she wants to improve her english and help her family.
She needs to speak english perfectly for her job.
Viviana's hobby is read scientific books.


CORRECTION:

I would like to introduce you to my partner, Viviana. Viviana is from Medellin, Colombia, where she worked as a waitress in a restaurant. Viviana has lived in N.Y. for 4 years. She came here because she wants to improve her English and help her family. She needs to speak English perfectly for her job.

Viviana's hobby is reading scientific books.

simone and viviana

i would liken to introduce you to my partner Simone and Viviana, Simone is from Brazil, where she worked as an babysitter, Simone has live in new york for fourth years. She came here because she wants to introduce English. she means to speak English perfectly for her job.

Simona hobby cooking. 


CORRECTION:

i would like to introduce you to my partner, Simone. Simone is from Brazil, where she worked as a babysitter. Simone has lived in New York for four years. She came here because she wants to improve her English. She means to speak English perfectly for her job.

Simone's hobby is cooking. 

Maria and Kevin

I would like to introduce you to my classmate, Kevin. He is from New York. He has lived in Brooklyn for ten years. He moved there because the rent in Manhattan is too damned expensive. Kevin is a teacher at LaGuardia Community College.

His hobby is writing fiction.