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Karynastory by Erick

Karyna was born in Colombia. She has been  livimg in  New York for six months , she has been  studying at  LGCC. since January and now she is in 4 th  level , she is married and like. the stoy to will be continue.

'Erick's life' by Kei

Erick was born in nice country that is Bolivia. He has been living in New York for ten years. Before he came here, he had lived in Bolivia till he turned 23 years old. Now he works in a parking garage in Manhattan. He is studying English in Lagurdia community collage. His hobbies are listing to music, weeing movies, and playing soccer.
One day, he experienced something incredible which he will never forget about. When World Trad Centers are attacked by tow air plains at Septentber 11th in 2001. He was working at the office. Big sound happened all of sudden and started shicking the floor he was standing on. As he looked at window, there are something that he would had seemed in a movie. A big cloud made dark everything he saw, and dusts were reaching to him as like big wave would attack and kill him. Erick had no idea what's going on and what would happen to people including him. He got out of the building and then he understand how bad situation he was being in. Fortunetlly, he did not get any hurts.

Erick story life by :Esa hasan

Erick was born in a nice country.Its name Bolivia. He has been living in New York City for ten years and he had been in Bolivia for twinty three years before he came here.Then he worked in a factory in Manhattan for one year but he swiched his work to parking garage man.
Erick has started to study English language at Leguardia college.His hobbies are seeing movies,listening to music, playing soccer and plaiyng vidio games.

Nohemi Story

Nohemi's story.
she is from Ecuador,she is 26 years old .My father brought to me and my brother in 2003 .
The first 3 years in this country I lived with my stepmother .After that I become citizen I brought to my mother and my sister  now we live together I am married I have a daughter My goal is study human resources  my hobby is play tennis .I like share my free time with my family

"Nohemi's story" by Marie

          Nohemi  was born in Equador.She has been in the U.S since 2003 with her sister. She is married and has a child. She lives now in Corona with her husband, child, mother and her sister. When she came here she spoke only spanish. At present, she is in Laguardia  Community College and learning English.










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Nohemi's History

Nohemi is from Ecuador, She come to the USA in 2003 and lives here in Corona, Queens.
She is married and has a child.
 Her parents are divorced, her mother and her sister live with her.

Nohemi has a job in a supermarket, she now speaks English but she needs to improve her grammar.
 Her goals is to study English to enrool in the college and study human resourses.
She became a USA citizen to bring her mother and her sister to live whit her in the USA.

Edwin Ventura

Nohemis's story by Noelia

Nohemis's story.
She is from Ecuador, she is 26 year old. She lives in Queens with her family. She works at the super market.
She lives in New York since 2003.
She is married and she has a daughter. She wants to study Human Resources. She likes to play tennis and enjoy her days off with her family.
She is happy and nice person. 

Nohemi's history

She was born in Ecuador .She came in 2003 with your brother. Your parents are divorced. She lives in corona Queens with your daugther. mother, sister and husband. Sher works in the supermarket. Your daughter is almost six years old. She has goals. She wants to study in the university, Humans resources.
She works in a neighborhood that she has that speak English.

MY FRIEND ALINA

She has been in NEW YORK since 1980.
she was over 40 a few years ago she has worked
as a cleaning lady, one day  she decided to go school
somebody told her she had to get haghier education.

She needs some tha only course  she took was a
bookkepper class.
Right now she is a manager in finance , she is nice person.

JOSEFINA CHAUCA

"The Great Story About Erick Mareno" by Karina Bitar

He has been living in NY for 10 years. Before he came here, he had been living in Bolivia for twenty two years.

Now he works in a parking garage. He studies English at La Guardia Community College and  he usually plays video games, listens to music and sees movie.

When he arrived, he saw the terrorist attack at the World Trade Center on 9-11. He told us this story,

"Alina's history"

              My friend's Alina, she has been in New York since 1980's. She was over 40. Few years ago, She has worked like a cleaning lady, one day She decided goes to the school, somebody  told her She had highter education.
              She needs only same curse. She took bookkeeper class.Right now She has been working in the hotel . She is al manager in the finance. My friends is a nice person .

Alinas corier story.

My friend Alina She has been in New York since 1980. She was over 40. Few years ago She has worked us a cleaning Lady. One day She decide go to school. Somebody told her she needs only the course, because She has higher education.She took bookkeeper class.Now she has working in the Hotel. She`s a manger in Finance.  She`s happy and nice person.
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Alina my friend from Poland

She has been in N.Y since 1980's , was over 40 . Few years ago she has worked as a cleaning lady . When day decide to go to school. Somebody  told her she had to get higher education. She needs only some cours. She took was a bookkeeper class. Right now is a manager in finance.